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I like version 2 better and it's lovely to hear it too.
And thanks for sharing the "Sea of Love" story. Always interesting to hear how these things arrive!
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"Untold" didn't feel too bad to me. It felt more like giving emphasis to "untold"
"And the butler laughter emanates from the hall" felt a bit more of a squeeze. Maybe:
While the butler is laughing from the hall
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Seriously good Carroll. I can imagine many people empathizing with this, especially teenage girls. If this was sung by a well known artist I reckon it would be a hit.
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That's a wild ride! Gothic horror show in episodic TV format.
I particularly like how the butler comes into it, as it suggests an endless chain of greedy protagonists meeting their doom.
No idea how to help you with it, but bravo!
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That's a touching song (sorry for the pun). It's a lovely message, and a really sympathetic treatment.
The piano is a good choice instrumentally, but I was hoping for a full orchestral swell when it got to the chorus - give it a feel good r…
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My first thought was: what an intriguing title! So it's got that going for it right off the bat.
A little self-referential: a song about writing love songs. I like it, gives it an angle.
There's an up and down to the emotional mood th…
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I think this works very well as a protest song. Message comes through loud and clear, and there's enough specific details around what's wrong to give it a feeling of weight.
I like too that the music is upbeat. It gives it a slight…
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I like that new idea Renee! It makes sense to show Happy using the balloons, and that kind of detail adds depth to a song.
Good choice!
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In general I agree with that. There's plenty of things I don't agree with th…
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Yes, I can see how it was inspired by Carroll's song.
You've got a real sense of foreboding building there.
I like simple rhyme scheme you're using. Gives it a feel like a weird nursery rhyme vibe to me. Wicked clown fee…
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Nice! Really like that. Another one where the repetition is working in your favour when set to music.
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What a great metaphor - love the broken crayons concept.
And a good message to go with it.
Love the pop vibe, good fit to the lyrics, and immaculate production as always.
Enjoyed this a lot!
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It's funny, but upbeat and happy can be harder to do at at times!
I like your chorus, especially that first line: "A balloon holds you up when you’re feeling down". That's got legs.
I agree with your about losing the bridge. It's abo…
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Yep, the 2nd one is working now Katie.
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I'm afraid any kind of filter is doing exactly what you described - taking out selective frequencies. There are different shapes of filter (often presets) that you might try, but ultimately it's a question of whether the benefit is worth the cost…
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Renee, your views are your own, but they are highly controversial to say the least. I personally don't agree with anything you just said.
When you make a post like this you are inviting criticism of your views. That's ok, but expect some fl…
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@Hardtwistmusic "This was one I wished I had written myself" I couldn't ask for a better compliment…
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Wishing you only the best Katie. Return when you feel ready.
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So are you able to now? Was that what the "Oh worked" meant? Otherwise I'm afraid I wouldn't know what to advise you.
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I'm closing this thread. It's getting out of hand.
I like that chorus! The rhythm of it as well as the melody.
It's also general enough that people can put themselves into the frame, and I think that helps a listener engage.
Nice!
Interesting idea! It's certainly got a novelty factor to it, and "queue jumper" is a good hook.
Queue jumper is a common term in Australia.
I'm not sure logically it makes sense, cause why does one prayer supercede another? But hey th…
That's a different style of music out of AI, and it fits nicely here.
The story works. Some things you never get over. I like how he's picking out similar girls trying to recreate the magic - but of course that doesn't work.
"I'd swap…
Is your aim here to intrigue people to find out more about Lady Wledyr? It certainly works for that.
The lyric by itself isn't enough to convey the whole story, though your narrative with it certainly helps. Even the moral of "money doesn't…
By my count it's around a dozen posts or so since anyone mentioned the actual song here!! This thread is for giving Tom feedback on his song after all.
@IronKnee Wasn't having a go at you Tom, nor anyone else for that matter. Just felt the need for something lighte…
Really captures that feeling of being tempted by something you know is only going to do your harm.
Wow! The music for this was so different to what I was expecting reading the lyric. And the better for it. Just shows how much of the mood and atmosphere is carried in the music. And how differently we can interpret the written word!
As a l…
Well that's got a real fire and brimstone feel to it. Dark lyrics.
For the faith of Allah
They’ll sacrifice it all.
I'll let that pass. Be aware however that whilst praising your own religion is fine on TSF…
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