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Well that's mournful! You've really got a sad melody to go with the lyric.
Can't say I agree with your POV, but you've definitely getting your message across!
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Please remember to post the lyric Carroll. When the music is AI generated, it's the lyric that counts here on TSF.
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That came out very well. I like the music you chose for it too.
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I don't remember hearing an elec guitar song from you before Tom. Nice change up!
Glad the solo was there, was hoping it would be.
Gutsy blues number.
Not sure about the abrupt ending though.
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I quite like this, but my wife really doesn't want to remember the details of the birth process - just the result! If other women are the same it may not be one for mothers. That doesn't mean you shouldn't write about it. And I think you've captu…
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" O-BummerCare " I think this brings your song down Renee. For me it misses the mark of being witty and comedic.
There'll be people for whom it resonates, but to me it feels like something a school boy would say rather than an experienced l…
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The song that just keeps giving!
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A little bit hard to comment on all these collectively, Katie.
But it looks like you've been able to capture your thoughts and feelings over time.
My respect for staying true to yourself.
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That's beautiful.
The music is delightful and I love the dreamy poetic lyrics.
And well done interweaving your own piano playing into the mix - that takes skill.
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Love it! Wonderful rhymes, and really hit the mark stylistically.
Clever, quirky and fun to listen to!
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This one's got an adult contemporary feel to it musically. You're playing uke, but I can imagine a band backing this track.
Really enjoyed that.
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Nice modern sound. Nice to write about him.
I have a feeling Sinatra's actual music and films are going to fade into the background long before the memes. Young uns will know the name without knowing his work.
Good song.
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That works very well!
V1 is too long, but V2 solves that.
I like those same lines that Gavin mentioned.
Good stuff!
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Thanks Rob! I don't know him, so always good to find a new songwriter / performer.
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Woohoo!
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Yep that works. Pretty sure we can all empathize with this one!
Good feel to it.
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I like your "I'm a human" hook. I think lines like this work best when they are slightly abstracted as this is.
Got a good feel to it.
Really small thing but you might try:
no one else, can see your fake smile → no one else can…
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Not everywhere! Summer here. Currently 32C / 86F
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Well there's a caution to us all!
I like that chorus. Would love to hear a pause before the last line though.
The down to earth, conversational style is definitely a strong fit for this one.
Good stuff.
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Love the drums in this. Great western song.
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This one doesn't hit me as hard as most of your others. It doesn't quite hook me in melodically.
It's still got a polished feel to it though.
The lyric is fairly straightforward, but I think the music is usually more important anyway…
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I feel like the chorus should do a repeat on those first lines:
I got to be free (I got to be free)
I got to be free (I got to be free)
but I saw in your comment to Renee that someone else wrote the lyric,…
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I look at "Change of tempo" and it feels like a lot more than that. It feels like two halves with this as the change point. The first half is about the world and gloomy, spiralling down. The second half is personal, about hope and resistance. The…
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Tons of emotion there.
"Looking for words that you don't say". Ouch. I think the narrator is in for further hurt!
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There's a lot of passion in the lyrics of the chorus. I think you should really sing out on those, and maybe lift the melody a little there to give it some intensity to match.
They’ve got us busy watchin’ the left hand
While…
Ah, I missed that. Needed the visual in your head Mr Tarantino.
Yep, that's a dark one too.
Strong story line. Not sure v1 is really setting up the context though. Maybe use that to describe the swede? Or just start at v2?
Well that's dark! And thank you for the link!
Reading, I found myself saying "Pushed it below, way down low" so maybe that's an option.
The last version of the site wasn't just torn down Kayla. The company that was hosting it shut down, so we were forced to move. Sadly the software we had just wouldn't run on the new site - it was too old. It was start clean or shut the whole thi…
We talking beaches? Count me in! I got one 90 miles close by. So I gather it's raining where you are Renee?
Good fun song.
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