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Great performance and song, PIU!
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Wow, man. This is really good. You have a really coalesced kind of sound. Tight and focused. I totally reminds me of Thomas Dolby for some reason. You have a great voice and a full package with the performance and mix. Cheers!
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Thanks Elvis. I’ll work on some flow. I see your points. I’m working past my own self doubt and can see that, as with my work as a jazz bassist, the flow of is in the confidence. And allowing myself to write whatever comes out. Not judging
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Thanks, Chris!
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Thanks, Elvis! Love the comments. Haha! Ive been telling my shrink and my wife that I'm struggling to break through into the emotional "meat" of my songwriting. My therapist said "write me a song". My wife said "just do it." Sometimes gettin…
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Awesome track and performance, man!
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Great lyric and development. Looking forward to checking out the audio later!
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Great feedback. Thanks, RDM!
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RDM,
Option
v1
I’m finding the strength in myself
to put the critic on the shelf
i’ve found a new way to be
That loving you is loving me
v2 (I think I like the other verse better still but …
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RDM, I agree. V1 requires some insight into my reason for writing this. It’s an assignment from my therapist and v1 comments on having good boundaries to support self care. Thanks for the comments. Much appreciated. Maybe I can try and writ…
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Thanks so much Sid! It’s fun to share this with you all. I’ve learned to enjoy the process here on this forum. It’s a nurturing community. Very much appreciated!
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Nice story here. I wanted more memories. Substance to support such feelings. My 2cents.
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What a great lyric! So balanced and transparent. Thank you.
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Hi, I would say to sketch the song with contrasting sections from modern to simple....maybe try a driving beat with something electronic or synth sounding. Write the song first. Then produce it. That's my vote.
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Wow, what a sweet tune. You have a great voice. Very touching.
I wanted a 2nd chorus after the 2nd round of verses instead of your short pause "Such a sweet little simple thing".
I really liked the key change in the chorus chords …
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Very cool vocal, lyric, and melody! I can hear different music under this. Especially a Rocka Rolla era Judas Priest style vibe.
2 cents.
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Thanks, RDM, this gives me a lot to consider. I think I'd be happy writing something that felt grounded in my feelings and honest.
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Oh, awesome. I was hoping it would bring some levity to folks. Thanks!
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Hahaha! This is hilarious. Love your grit, Elvis. I'm with you. I appreciate your straight-forward honesty.
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Again, thanks to all commenting on the thread. All opinions welcome. This is meant to hopefully encourage a variety of perspectives. Of course, some will have strong opinions and techniques based on years of experience. I'm thankful to ALL of…
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Very cool project! I really like the energy throughout. The latin rhythm was a good choice. It reminds me of some of the west coast writers like Stephen Stills or Graham Nash. Cool stuff!
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Thanks Katie!
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Thanks, Syd. I do feel like this question is getting answered from a variety of angles. I'm sensing a truth starting to emerge:
It's through the work, ritual and honesty of one's process that the gems of catharsis emerge. Am I just makin…
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Hey thanks, Chris! I'm a hot tea drinker myself. Bubble tea is typically sweetened cold tea with milk and tapioca pearls in the bottom of the cup that you drink out of an oversized straw.
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Thanks, Elvis! I appreciate your input on this.
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Ok. Thanks for the response. Sometimes I find feelings to be intimidating and foreign until they just drop in my lap. Haha.
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Oh, man. These comments really made my day. Thanks to all of you for taking time to comment. I will check out some of the leads on this one. Haha, it's pretty similar to Java Jive. What a great song that one is. I really enjoyed Helge Schnei…
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Good on you to say something with this. We just had some child porn stuff blow up here in Detroit recently and it's good to see this speaking out against such darkness. I love the metaphor of the thin blue line.
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I love the punk vibe. The tag line adds the right amount of space when I needed. This is really cool.
When I was listening I hoped you would throw some shredding guitar in there....
Yeah, I felt refreshed by that. I feel like mus…
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Thanks for sharing! I'm enjoying the scene so far. Feel free to add some more to the story, it could benefit from a little develop (another verse or two). Way to get yourself out there.
Copyright's can be helpful but, as mentioned, onc…
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