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Suno is wonderful technology. Results vary, but that's a decent rendition of your lyric.
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At the moment this feels like a poem more than a song to me. I can't find a rhythm to it, just reading it. If it's to be a song, then it has to be something that can be set to music. It's possible that you have it sorted in your mind, and it's ju…
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Psychological thriller is a good description. Love the guitar riffs!
Not sure about the FX after "You're mentally ill". It does seem like it follows on from "mentally ill", but musically it also feels like a spot where you could jump right …
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Wow, that's dark. Good, but dark.
Certainly packing an emotional punch with this one.
And the title sets you up to knock you down.
I wasn't sure about using we/our in v2 when everything else is I/my, but other than that it feels…
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If it has brought tears to your wife's eyes, then it is done!
I think the tone is just right. It's meant to be loving.
Lovely.
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Thanks Matt! Appreciate the listen and the feedback. 😁
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Lol. That's the trouble with songwriting! Ask 10 people you'll get 11 different answers! And all of them with some reasonable point to be made. It's also part of what makes it interesting! There's no right or wrong here. Go with what feels comfor…
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James Gilmartin has a unique vocal style and beautiful poetic lyrics. But it's just as well he posted the lyrics as otherwise it would be difficult to make them all out!
I've never gotten this one out of my head
I think on you…
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I prefer "studying" myself, as it feels more conversational, but either could work. Will come back after I've had a listen.
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"Age gets better with wine" wonderful line, I like that even more than "one more glass of time", which itself is a good one.
The rhymes across all those verses is very skillful!
A really strong lyric in this one.
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Very smooth Sid! Lovely ballad.
My only thought here was maybe: but won't let me near → they won't let me near
I think you've nailed it with the not knowing being the hardest part. Doesn't let you move past things.
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The pronouns seem fine to me Renee. I think it's clear what they mean.
I like the "we're old" in there too. Not only referring to the ex but also includes the listener.
It's a lovely lyric.
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Thanks for that, the link is working now!
You have a wonderful voice, it lights up this track.
The instrumentation feels very polished, very modern. A sparse feel which spotlights your voice.
Love those extra vocals when they co…
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Yep, definitely got that sing-a-long factor! That feels just right for your lyric.
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Good advice! And I'll add...come back to it later!
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ditto.
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This is nice, and the message is lovely. Always room for more kindness in the world.
It's already sounding good. My only suggestion is to sing the 2nd "Kindness is cool" the same as the 1st. See what you think.
Like the repeat on the …
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@ChrisPrice Thanks Chris! Ok, you and Joseph have convinced me that I should at least try integrating the two,…
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Nice lyric leaning into the pop/funk sound which works well.
An emphasis on rhythm and rhyme and a strong result!
Eyes of the lonely, how they cry,
That's a great hook, and perfect for this kind of song.
Very good! Yep, there's just enough variation in the chorus to make it feel different, and the Bridge hits harder now too. Good choices on your part.
I like the finger picking, but as you know that's my kind of song!
No more suggestio…
@icystorm Thanks Joseph! At the moment, probably not. To be honest the Ukulele sounds a bit thin to me, and this s…
Good fun, and the chorus is catchy too!
Nice riffs on the keys.
I like the second vocal, but you might need to manage the volume to keep them from competing.
Good stuff!
Renee, this starts really strong. Verse 1 and the Chorus are dead on.
I feel like the parts about Doc West are actually the weakest. I can absolutely understand you wanting to commemorate him - that may be the whole point of the song! And n…
Very evocative and some rich visuals there. Strong theme. Good narrative. I feel like all the elements are there, but for some reason it doesn't quite feel like it's coming together to me. I can't quite put my finger on it. It's got a tradition…
I like this a lot. Some lovely lines in there. My favorite is the last, but these jumped out at me:
Anger is a crutch you're leaning your weight on
But it doesn't help you take a stand
but they're all <…
If you're talking about the feature here on TSF, then it comes standard with the software, so the thank you goes to whoever made it.
Now you're cooking! Feels like the music and the lyric are lining up.
I particularly like how you sing "Blame it on God" now.
As another suggestion, try a little variation at the start of the chorus by opening on a major chord there …
Arthritis is a curse! I can well imagine it limiting what you can do. I am going to check out the new version now.
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