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Sounds good to me!
Only thing I'll point to is "Two restless souls worn down by lonely nights" feels a little cramped.
Good stuff.
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This is nice. Got me in from the get go.
I felt like you might benefit from a melodic variation at: Behind the wheel and a broken plow
That real country vibe suits this to a tee.
I like your hook too. It's a nice detail that kin…
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"She walks in like last call lightning" what a great opening line!
"One’ll put me flat on my back" - sounds like they both might do that!
Really cool vibe. I like how it invites the listener to decide which they might choose.
Go…
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Love the first person perspective on this! You ARE the ghost. And you can take that (meta)physically or psychologically as you wish.
I really enjoyed the music on this one - kudos to Marcus. It's not the 'ghostly' atmospheric you might expe…
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Nice intro, definitely gets your attention!
Atmosphere seems a good fit for the lyric.
Nation against nation
Kingdom fighting kingdom
They work really well as lyric lines
Not my thing, but I thi…
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My favorite line: "Sunday mornings smell like sin"
I think this is controversial enough to get attention, down the middle enough to satisfy most regular people.
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Very meta, writing a song about writing a song!
Like the melody in this. Gentle and easy, with the "No you can't go back"s in there for dynamic contrast.
I'm sure most everyone will have felt something similar at some point.
Wor…
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I like the lyric! Sure it's been done before, but so what?
There's a rough edge to it that makes it feel real (hopefully it isn't!!).
Small suggestion: It’ll leave me wherever I fall → It’ll leave me where I fall . …
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Not my style, but I have to admit it's a good match between lyric and music!
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Kudos for being ready to rework. I don't think you can expect anything to come out perfect first time!
There's a marked step up to my ear. It feels more polished, and smoother.
Good job on this!
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Like that opening. Both visual, and get's you right into that 'travelling song' vibe.
That refrain 'Send me down the line" works a treat
Great drifter song.
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I wasn't sure about this at the start, but it grew on me.
I like how you're applying "don't break the law" in different contexts. Gives the song somewhere to go, and broadens the message too.
Nice! Keep 'em coming Guy.
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That's a bit special. Love the tone and atmosphere of this.
One to be proud of.
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It's hard to pull off a song like this without it sounding crass or insensitive.
I think you're on the right track by writing it from their perspective. Laughing at themselves, rather than being laughed at is definitely the right approach.<…
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"Swear we’re deep, dodge the dive" love the alliteration in that!
Yeah v2 has got the rhythm nailed. The others and chorus not quite, but that's a Suno issue not yours. V2 shows it can work.
Better to laugh at human behaviour than des…
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Well I don't know what it is that you just can't stop. But maybe that's intentional to keep you guessing?
It reads like a love gone wrong song, but with the focus ...elsewhere. And the ending seemed a little odd, listening to the radio.
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News said “Be scared tonight” - that's a strong line! And a truth to boot I think.
Another for your outlaw album. 😀
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"What D'You Think of That?" is a great title and hook! And if feels very down to earth and relatable.
"And your stunning back" doesn't quite land for me. Maybe more like "sliding down your back"?
When it gets to "Intelligent plans, el…
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Pardon me, have to step out to untwist my undies! 😀
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A bit disconcerting to have commercial success I think, which doesn't mean you shouldn't write it or it doesn't have value. Certainly makes you think!
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We're not going to argue about the Epstein files here. If we do I'm closing the thread.
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Watch out Elvis! You're using the same musical notes as everyone else!
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I didn't like the way the 3rd line is squashed into the 4th in the first verse:
...blue sky,
Feel the warmth...
which is probably also what you meant when you said it's a little rushed.
The sort of octave jump in the first…
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Yep, soul version sounds good to me.
Not sure the metaphor about the weather is clear. I can't work out if he's hoping for sun or rain, or how they represent his current feelings and state of mind.
"There will never be rain inside my …
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I think jgkojak has made it clear that he's heard your point and doesn't agree with it. There's no point labouring it, doesn't help anyone.
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"Thin skin nation, walkin’ on eggshell streets" that's a brilliant line!
This song itself might be a bit serious for the message. Maybe try embedding some lighter lines in there?
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Love the lyric. Sentimental look back at growing up in the country.
Drifting on the breeze like a dandelion is a great way to capture the feeling.
Not sure Suno has quite got this one right, but the feel and atmosphere is all there.
Very topical! You'll have to self-publish though! Can't imagine a production company taking this one on!!😂
All about the sound for me. The lyric is fine, but it's the music that gets me in.
Really enjoyed that! Both versions :)
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