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I think we can safely rule out the lyric being AI written. It's got Sid's fingerprints all over it!
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Using simpler words and …
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Curses! They're on to me! Better look like I'm doing something for a while 😉
A delightful tapestry of emotional anguish and melancholic yearning, wrapped in a splendid lyrical form! One can't help but notice the juxtaposition of tender sen…
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Really moody and atmospheric! Upping the vocals as Chris suggested would be a good thing.
Only 8 lines, but it really filled out the song. Didn't feel like it was dragging at all.
Good stuff!
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I like this, but I'm not sure the chorus is strong enough. I'm wondering if there is a way to make more use of the "eyes" from "hard times in her eyes"? Something a bit more personal and less abstract?
Also, I feel like the scars should be …
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I think that holds up pretty well. It's a long song, but it didn't feel at all like it was dragging.
I'm less concerned about the structure. There's all kinds of ways to put a song together, and listening to this it felt perfectly fine to m…
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Got a bitter and twisted vibe to those lyrics!
I feel like what's currently v3 "Can’t stop the world from spinning..." might make a better bridge, and they're both saying similar things. And it's my favorite part of the song BTW.
Stro…
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There are two basic approaches:
- Have autotune improve your vocal
- Have generative AI create a separate vocal using your recording as input
Neither is perfect. Autotune is an established technique, a…
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What a classic! Put a smile on my face 😁
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That is so of the era. It could easily have been a classic of its time.
The vocal harmonies are so lush!
In v1 you've got:
You only call me when you need me
But you never want me, no not anymore
I think that chorus is particularly strong. As a suggestion, you might try "Oh don't you love me, please say you love me" the 2nd time just to add some variation.
In v1 you might consider swapping "not meeting the gaze" to "not meeting …
Good song! Strong lyric.
You might consider upping the volume on the main elec guitar to bring out that rock feeling a bit more (not the solo the main accompaniment)
Thanks @Plain_Jane! If it gives you feels then I'm happy!
Not bad! Good visuals.
As a suggestion, you could add an extra line to the end of the chorus "Standing outside, in the pouring rain", I like that image and repeating it could bookend the chorus. You'd get the internal rhyme on outside/lied …
I like the structure. I can see it working in a modern style. The repetition used consistently gives it a cohesion.
Works very well. Good, solid country song.
Thanks @KatiesPRIDE, good to see you're still around 😀
LoudMe is another AI site that's fairly new and free at the time I'm writing.
I tried it out giving it the lyrics from one of my prev songs, and i have to say that I think it did a pretty good job:
Thanks for posting those - makes it much easier!
I really like: "I'm still loving you with every goodbye". Perhaps that's another song for you to write!
Welcome to the forum Dan!
Classic modern country sound you've got going there.
The lyric sounds pretty smooth from what I could hear. And "Hurts to love you" is definitely a country title!
Love those freaky names you give your characters!
It's a strong tune, some really interesting chord sequences there. Lovely clean mix (as always!)
Bit of dirt in the guitar works really well too. Like the ending!
Good stuff Chri…
Works very well. I think the chorus is strongest, as it should be.
In v3 these lines felt a little disconnected to me:
And the only light that comes,
we found it's all right.
But it's a minor point. A…
Enjoyed the first one and this one too! You've really captured that ragtime sound!
Thanks for posting these. Puts a smile on my face. 😁
Good rhythm and mood to it, and it matches the lyric.
Good structure to the lyric, and it comes out very smoothly.
It's really solid as is, but probably needs some original element to make it stand out more from the crowd.
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I particularly like the Bridge in this one. It's very visual and evocative.
@Kayla813 Thanks Kayla! Appreciate the listen and the comment.
Very good indeed. I particularly like the forever/tether rhyme, and also: Lines that mirror my age, run from stern to bow.
The music came out well too, it's a good match.
Not 100% sure about the bridge. It sounds like that is his deat…
I like the story, but the AI vibe feels off to me on this one. It's too nice and sweet. I'd try for something more like Richard Thompson's 1952 Vincent Black Lightning. in Good times with a bad man Comment by RainyDayMan August 2024
Great to hear something different! I enjoyed that. Post some more if you have them.
Very nice indeed. Strong lyrics, and the music came out well too.
Good stuff.
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