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  • I actually like both versions, but I can see why you might prefer the slower one.

  • I like this Renee. It's kind of whimsical and sad at the same time.

    BTW I could do a fade out for you at the end rather than abrupt cut off if you wanted to. You would just need to send me the original track plus your vocal.

  • Nicely done Bill.

    I like "Leave life woes and worries behind" , and the chorus altogether is feeling very solid now.

  • Lovely groove, carried by the bassline. Got real mood and atmosphere too.

    Very well done, Steve!

  • I like the edits you did, I think you've improved it.

    You might try "He’s too busy chasing things" > "He’s too busy chasing other things" depending on how it fits the meter.

    I'm not very competent …

  • You've got a unique style going here, both lyrically and (via the AI) musically.

    I enjoyed it, but I don't really know how to help you with it.

    The repetition on "When I see only you" gives the song structure and makes it work. Withou…

  • Ai did a great job on the music here.

    Overall it's a really singable number. I can imagine teenage girls going off about it were it sung by a heartthrob.

    Nicely done.

  • I think the overall structure is all there. I like the concept.

    A couple of suggestions:

    I know a man who is quite wealthy → I know a man who's flush with cash (or something colloquial )

    Always worried about keeping → Always wo…

  • Enjoyed the music, some nice chord sequences and atmosphere.

    If you'd like comments on the lyric, it's really helpful if you can post the lyric here on TSF.

  • This one doesn't do it for me.

    Quantum superposition is a fascinating subject, but hard to make engaging as a song.

    Re the title, there are many song with duplicate titles, I think you should call it whatever you think is most approp…

  • This one hits hard, in fact it kicks in the guts.

    Well done Renee, it really is a powerful and emotional song.

  • I think it's improving.

    It feels like the 1st line of the chorus should end in "I" → Give me Friday nights where I

    And perhaps the 3rd line isn't quite there yet. Maybe: Surround myself with friends and drinks ?

  • I like the "To get lost in the melodies" line there. Perhaps there is something around strangers getting together and getting lost in the melodies?

  • Yeah, it probably isn't going to be a smash hit, but that doesn't mean it's not worthwhile!

  • Now that's a blast from the past seeing Vlad and Jason working with you on this. Haven't seen those guys around in years!

    And it's a great combo! Love this song. I think the lift is my favorite part.

    In the chorus it feels like the vo…

  • The descriptions are very vivid, I could picture it all. I think the verses are stronger than the chorus in this one.

    I didn't really have any expectations for the music, so it felt pretty good to me, though again the chorus not quite as st…

  • Wow! This came out brilliantly! I love it.

    Definitely a change in style for you, but you've nailed it.

    "Cause misery loves company" is a great phrase, but honestly the whole thing just works in that style.

  • Love the lyric on this!

    I can imagine it being done in a much heavier style - like Greenday.

  • Well thank you Renee! Back at you!

  • This works well. Lovely title and hook.

    I like the "I'm better off without you" vibe and the various references to feminine touches.

    "drink breakfast in bed" is a lovely phrase that almost passes unnoticed!

    The bridge does the r…

  • Nice! My favourite lines are:

    for there is no greater treasure

    than love without measure

    Simple and effective.

  • Great to see you Michael!

  • You cover some territory in terms of style!

    You might try converting v3 into a bridge and go for some variation in the melody there.

    Holds together well.

  • I like the doubled vocals on this one. You might be better sticking with either the hard panned style or the more central panning, but switching between them is a bit distracting.

    There seems to be more reverb on the vocal than the guitar, …

  • I like the song overall and the quick punchy lyric, but there's a couple of spots that feel a little rushed:

    can think on his feet, too

    A man not afraid to open up, I can rely on

    This is to a backing track,…

  • Appreciate the honesty! And I'm not against people using AI sites to generate whole songs, but this isn't the right site to post those.

  • Thanks Tommy! I was wanting to do something different to traditional uke strumming and found that picking patterns from the guitar transfer across quite well. "Sultry" is a good word for at least parts of this.

  • I don't understand this one, and someone who does might respond differently, so a large grain of salt for what follows.

    Your chorus ends "if not for Magdalene", and I thought you would go for "if not for my Mary Magdalene". Not sure if you …

  • Thanks Renee! It has been fun. I don't really know whether I'll keep using it or not. I have my 3 songs now for the next Open Mic session at my local venue, so that part is done. May come down to whether I can write stuff to use both guitar and u…

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