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Well I read the verse and went, wait what? And then went back over it carefully line by line. I think it was partly influenced by the fact that it's only because it's a male singer that you can assume "you" = "her"
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I like the chorus in this. I haven't seen you use repetition like that before, but it works here. And I think it makes it very accessible to people in a more general way. Could easily be a song that people enjoy, but can only remember the words t…
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Yes, verse 3 comes out of nowhere! Very dark twist.
I think it also takes a bit of thought to work out what's happening there. The 'new guy' and 'her' have to be identified, up till then it's just the narrator and "you". It's all in there, …
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That's a good one. That sort of bullet list structure: "There’s no pleasing ‘em, There’s no teasing ‘em, No appeasing ‘em" etc gives it a real style of its own. And the Bridge using rhymes on alternate lines keeps to the style, but gives the ear…
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Nice intro! Like the pauses, and was that a key change going into the first chord of the first verse? You don't hear that often!
Overall I really like the guitar work in this song.
My favorite line: "Sunsets beats ole Pablo Picasso"
By the way Skhanda, when you're using AI generated music we ask you to put that in the post as some people have an aversion to it. You have, I can see it there, but it might be better if it was at the top where it's more prominent. Something for …
Just about the time
my assumptions fell
What a wonderful start! I love those lines. Get right into the meat of it.
The harmonica works really well with this style of song too.
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No worries. As I said, I agree with you, let's focus on your song.
I meant literally in this thread - saying "you'll notice that i didn't respond, nor will i respond, to Ironknee's comment in his song" *is* responding to his comment, with negative connotations, though mild. Nor is it a comment about your song - …
You just did.
Enough gentleman. Let's get back to discussing the song, or I'll have to close this one down.
I agree. I made the same comment to you in Tom's "Make America Great Again" thread.
These are song threads, not discussions on the topic itself.
The purpose is to help the songwriter improve their song by giving feedback and suggesti…
Renee, I know you have strong religious views, and they likely don't mesh with this song.
I'm happy for you to say your piece, and having said it, move on.
Members can post songs on Christianity, Atheism, or any particular viewpoint.…
Yes, the feel of it is wonderful! Loved letting it wash over me.
At the risk of sounding like a broken record, can you please include the lyrics when you post Elvis? They were right there on Youtube, so it's only seconds to do.
Yes, this really does feel commercial quality, especially the chorus. Was the…
I think you would be delighted if this played over a supermarket PA with shoppers bopping along and never thinking about what it means.
I like it. A relationship song rather than a love song, but it sure feels on point!
I like your opening line "Well, I might as well be talkin’ to the birds" - it feel really natural and sets up the song.
And the chords and music fit n…
Now that is something we agree on!
Guys, we're getting off track again. If you have issues with a member's behaviour, please PM me. It's my role to deal with them. These kind of posts merely increase negativity.
This is a song thread.
I think it's too strong to classify these comments as AI Bashing. Some discussion and difference of opinion is acceptable provided it's civil. You have the right to post, others have a right to reply, provided it doesn't get out of hand. I'll lea…
This is an interesting one Rob. In the verses it feels like you've really focused on the melodic vocal melody, and backed off the guitars to make room for them, and I think that works very well. And then of course you demonstrate your skills in t…
That's nice Elvis, really enjoyable. Just what I needed!
If you wish to discuss politics, take it to the General Discussion section.
This is a song thread. If you don't wish to help Tom write / improve this song, move along.
"Geron" is an unusual word, I couldn't even find that in the dictionary. I'm not against trying to pick the best word for the slot even if it's uncommon, but I think you will lose many people there.
I like the poetic style, but the meaning …
It's a political song, and invites political comment. Let's all keep focus on the song though.
This one just works. That simple storyline just laid out for everyone to hear.
Suits your playing style too.
Good work!
Indeed. I might pay to see that!
Ai generated music is a major disruption to both the industry and the individual. It's not surprising that it causes volatile and polarized reactions - all major disruptions do. It calls into question how meaningful and valuable songwriting is …
This thread has become far too negative. I am closing it.
Well I don't agree with the sentiment, but it's well written.
Got a Dylan, protest era vibe to it.
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