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@ChrisPrice Ha! Slightly ironic, but I'm happy for any of your tunes to come up in my playlist, including that …
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You're having some troubles lately with those darned Soundcloud links!
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Very smooth Carroll. Reads very well.
You might consider "things were going my way" → "things started going my way", just to emphasize the change.
Loneliness is a curse.
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I really like the premise of this. Sitting down to a meal with the ghost of Billy the Kid as if he was still alive.
Strong visuals and details there to bring it to life.
Nicely done!
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Just a hint of sadness there at the end that she's so out of it she doesn't realize she is dancing alone. But then would she care even if she knew?
But mostly kept fairly light. A party girl waiting for party night. When you're young that's…
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I think this would make a great track for an album rather than a single.
The melody is a bit subtle and takes the odd unexpected turn. It hasn't got the sing-along factor of a hit single, but it rewards the listener.
Loved the harmon…
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Congrats Bill on trying out the new format. I think you got it just right.
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@BeatlesFan64 Cheers Tommy! Yes, they were good suggestions, and just looking back, I didn't think th…
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I liked these lines:
The vase has fallen
And shattered like our friendship
And how that leads into Shattered glass, broken vows
It felt a bit cramped here: "Could it be the calm"
I'd try to vary…
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I like the rhythm and rhyme of it. It's not really my style of choice, and I'm sure that affects how I see it.
I feel a bit remote from it. It's got a slice of life feel, but I don't really connect with it or feel touched emotionally.
Bit of a melancholic vibe to it. Bit of dirt and grit as well.
Lyric reads well. I particularly like "no-tell motel"
You just know that one win won't be enough. He's going to keep going until he cant do it anymore.
I like the fast paced sound of it.
The melting faces puts me in mind of Dali.
It's a lovely collection of songs! I was lucky enough to listen before all the plays ran out!
What is your thinking for releasing them as an album rather than individually?
I love the way you sing Hallelujah!
I'm afraid this one isn't communicating much to me. If there's meant to be a message in it, then I'm not getting it.
Done in your trademark style.
I use only the free version of Soundcloud, but for me that's a place to store and access a recording, not based on trying to reach an audience. I'm afraid I don't have any experience in how to promote your songs.
I think the shape of the song is all there. It has a raw power, and I would second Gavin's comment about honesty and intimacy.
What it needs now is to be set to music. Then you can make any fine adjustments to fit the meter, cadence or rhym…
That's a very polished sound. Do you mean it took 100 tries on Suno to get this particular track? Or that you generated 100 tracks and took samples from different ones? Either way that's a big commitment! But Congratulations! It turned out very f…
That's very sweet, without being overdone. Lovely song.
I found myself singing: Of how beautiful, beautiful, you were so you might try that for size.
Thoroughly enjoyed my listen!
Very different style for you, both lyrically and musically! But a good one.
Yes, "self" is a bit hard to rhyme, which is a shame.
So a bit of innuendo here?
To my mother it would annoy
felt a little …
@TammyB thanks for the thoughtful feedback, Tammy! I'm reading that as meaning the music isn't emotional enough, wh…
Hope you're right Elvis! At the moment it feels like watching a slow motion train wreck, but we're all on the train!!
This one feels like a dream sequence to me. Really vivid images that morph from one to the next without me necessarily understanding them, or the thread between them.
By the end, it feels like the narrator has been reincarnated as a tree o…
Lots of detail captured there! Clear message and viewpoint.
"an' where, eagles fly no more." is a strong line, though maybe not harsh enough given the rest of the lyric.
Well written.
I can always post the lyrics for you, Carroll, if you get stuck. Just msg me. I took the liberty of making a direct link to the song rather than just to your Soundcloud account.
I like the sound of this, sort of rock / blues crossover. Chor…
An interesting piece, if somewhat esoteric. I like the way you have phrases split across lines.
I think I prefer the first version where it evolves from spoken word into music, as that feels like a forward progression to me.
I found the music very soothing, light, positive. The lyric is a bit different though, there's an undercurrent of darkness, things going to fail. I'm not sure if that contrast was deliberate to create tension, or just turned out that way!
N…
Very powerful language, well done.
Loved how casually you dropped "everyday" into "Hearing the who shot who stories today, everyday"
I found the lyric had the most punch where it was speaking about Black women more in the abstract. T…
Oh I like how that came out! Got a beatlesesque sound to it, which feels appropriate.
I could listen to this many times.
@bhengen Doesn't matter who found it Bill, you were with me all the way down that yellow brick road!
Has a curious childlike quality to it, though the language is clearly aimed at adults, as is the musical style you've chosen for it.
Some lovely phrases like: neon's flowing wine
And I like the rhyming structure. Hard to keep that go…
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