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Those Cohen sisters had some chutzpah!
Good fun song Sid. 😁
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I like this Carroll. Strong opening, and all the verses hold up well.
I'm not convinced you need the pre-chorus, I don't think it's adding much. I think you might be better extending the chorus, either with a direct repeat or a variation an…
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Rather a bleak outlook! But some lives are sad ones.
Held my attention all the way through. Like the way the song lingers on "fool".
Appreciate if you could post the lyrics here on TSF, even when they are available on Youtube etc. Mak…
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There should be an "Upload Image" button as you are creating your post, but don't use it too frequently please. Space is a limitation for the site, which is why all the music is uploaded elsewhere and just linked here.
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Homework? No! A voyage of discovery!! 😁
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No worries Elvis! You know what you want there.
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Words ending in 'ck' and similar give a very clipped sound - hard to sing out on - and that can be an issue at the end of phrases. Good if you want an explosive type of sound, bad if you want a drawn out note. Use with caution.
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I particularly liked these lines:
There ain't nothing clearer
Than the first look in the mirror
I'm not a fan of the repeat on "wreck" at the end of the chorus either. Sounds a bit harsh. I think you migh…
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That's a tough one Tammy! I might choose Cat Stevens, and his albums: Tea for the Tillerman, and Teaser and the Firecat, when he was at his best.
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Nice! And welcome to the forum.
I like how you're using blue jeans as the signal for her change here. It's a specific detail that grounds it.
There's a wistful, sweet sadness to it. And the love for her shines through without being st…
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No worries! These are only ever suggestions along the lines of "have you thought about.." and clearly you have!
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I like this. But I think the chorus needs something in between the direct repetition of the lines. Some kind of "it's not working" lines. And then maybe the final line could be "we’re breaking [pause] each other’s hearts." just to give it a littl…
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I'm in the Version A camp, but that's of course up to you.
Listening to this, I got to the post chorus: "But to me you’ve always been my number one!" and went, wait, this is a relationship song?
I think you need to set that u…
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Bit of a cynical take on conclave! Certainly a vivid picture you've painted.
I notice this is about Pope Paul (one of them!) rather than the late Pope Francis.
Not sure who will enjoy this one, but it should certainly get some attenti…
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Nice! I'd be tempted in v2 to make it a question: Is your heart tempted...? Leave the tension there. Does the other person feel the same way? Keep the listener wondering.
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That's solid! really nice rocking sound.
Clear, easy to follow story line.
One people can really sink their teeth into.
Love to hear a new song from you!
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Thanks for that! Much easier to hear how the lyric and melody come together.
Beyond my previous comments, the only thing I noticed was the lead into the Bridge. Rather than clipping the line there, you might be better just finishing "be…
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Not at all silly Tommy. Just right on the money for that era. And the sound too.
Love this line: "But though I’d finally found the right combination, my hesitation led me astray"
and how you sing the final "I crumpled that paper and …
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Love the intro and the mesh of traditional chinese melody with modern pop - so appropriate!
I love "Blondes in Qipao's, wear a frown". Showing the contrast like that hits hard. If you can, I would lose the narrative "Tradition clashes with …
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My favorite line: "You needed me but I needed you more"
This is lovely. Really gentle and loving. It makes you warm inside just hearing it.
I love all the specifics, though I would say that likely makes it less commercial, but I don't…
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Noticeably better Rob! Much cleaner, no fuzz and I can hear both the guitar and your vocals more clearly.
Like the way you're bringing a second guitar in and out of the mix, and the 2nd vocal repeating "better" with the hard panning.
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Just beautiful Gavin! A father's love and pride really shines through in this one.
And beautifully played too, loved the guitar, and the violin!
Something for her to treasure always.
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Can I just take a moment to congratulate all of you on having a sensible and reasonable discussion on AI generated music? It's far too rare, and lovely to see.
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Written by a pair of amateurs I believe, but we'll see how it goes!
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@sidshovel actually I'm planning to give them "Bottle of Vintage Wine" amongst others!
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I like it very much so far. A rousing anthem both musically and lyrically. Lots of symbolism there with "Fly, brave eagle, fly" and the references to Prometheus and Icarus.
I like the military style drums in the intro as well.
Nicely …
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Very poignant indeed.
Your second chorus is slightly different to the first, and to me, better. I particularly liked
time to find a new me.
in the second line, rather than just
to f…
Thanks Sid, I'll give it a whirl!
Thank you! Good to know the outro works, at least for some people! It's much better than an abrupt ending, but a little long for my taste.
Nice to hear how it sounds in its final form. Thanks for sharing that!
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