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The first thing that struck me was aligning the swing of the pendulum with the beat of the music. A small thing but it really kicks!
"when you and I drank from love and sin"
what a lovely line!
But then fo…
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Well, fortunately I'm right down the bottom near Bass Strait, and the water is always cold there. Maybe I'd feel right at home!
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Could be death, but I'm leaning towards depression based on the "Why even try?" line.
I like how you've set this as a seduction, there's power in that. And that you have to keep choosing the positive.
A light song with a deep…
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I like the contrast between Brighton beach, which is presumably sunny and warm and lovely, and lying dripping in a muddy hole.
It's a good story, and came out well in the AI music.
Enjoyed it!
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I thought this sounds surprisingly good. It's well written, but I wasn't sure how enjoyable it was going to be, but I was pleasantly surprised.
I wonder if it would be better or worse having 3 different singers, 1 for each POV?
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Can't access the lyrics, I' m afraid, don't have permission.
I'm going to provide feedback on this as an intended commercial product, rather than as an amateur recording. If it was the latter I would be much more positive!
The overall…
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If you feel your songs/lyrics are already of a commercial standard with some chance of making money, then there may be little for you to gain by posting here. What sort of feedback would help you if you are already at that point?
The audien…
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Certainly is an ear worm!
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To get a proper legal answer, you probably need to consult a lawyer. If the unthinkable happens and you make a lot of money from a lyric/song and it includes specific lines or phrases contributed by a member, would they sue or otherwise expect co…
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Post away! Hope we can help you with it.
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This is cool. Like an early 70s vibe.
I was just bopping along to it. Don't need to read too much into it, just enjoy!
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Tough subject! And a fascinating story.
I think you've nailed it with the style, feels very appropriate. And somehow seems to take the edge of the violence.
Shame the ending got cut. Can you extend it?
You could consider "He wa…
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Simple pleasures and love being enough. It's a good message.
Strong start, good visuals, a sense of place, and I like that you are showing rather than telling the simple things at first.
I'm wondering whether it should be "for the…
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"Breakin records and breakin hearts" is a strong start to the chorus. Lots of energy there.
And yes, it really does sound like Rod Stewart, though I'm not sure that's a good thing. Artists should probably have control over where their voice…
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"Future is Rosie" is a great hook!
I like the lyric. Good story, strong visuals and sense of place.
And I like the rhyming scheme.
Only thing I'd point to is that the start of the chorus seems to go down in energy/intensity com…
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Came out very well!
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This isn't my favorite of yours.
"nobody knows what state she's in" is clever and cool. I like how you put that directly after the New York line to underline the play on words.
I think the mighta and maybe lines weaken it. It doesn't …
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Not sure this one really works. I think the chorus is too weak. The story is all in the verses, and the chorus isn't really adding anything.
I'd also say that the Bridge doesn't feel like a natural progression from what comes before, feels …
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Suno's done a good job with this! Lovely sound.
I like the way you unfold the lyrics. It's starts with him and shifts to her. It's got punch.
I like how you describe him being a jerk, and her leaving him. It doesn't always come off we…
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Really good! Tons of atmosphere right in sync with the lyric.
Love the whispers and the vocal FX.
Lovely guitar work, and a very clean sound overall.
Probably far too accurate!
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This seems like the best use of AI music to me. Write the song yourself, then try to get as polished a version of it as you can.
I like your own voice, and it worked very well for this track as I recall, but you're not going to get the harm…
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Clever idea. And you've captured the sound of it here too,
Not sure about the message! Seemed like a good time to me! But then we all think that about our own era. And I can easily imagine a teen having this kind of perspective on it.
Thanks Danny! It was actually from a couple months back, and went well. But I've got another open mic tomorrow night, so I'll try to break that leg there!! 🤣
Simple, straightforward and works well on that basis.
Hook has got a nice sing a long factor.
One to relax into and sing to.
I thought the title sounded familiar! Glad to hear the new version
Too soon I feel her slipping into the day
That was the first of many lines that caught my ear.
I love the way it unfolds. The tenderness an…
The slower you get
The faster the women walk by
Those are lovely lines! And the whole song feels very much like it could be of the era. If I heard this playing somewhere I would just assume it was.
Yes, there if often a lack of context left in the posts, and it's easy to misinterpret. Something to bear in mind.
Tammy had just joined the forum, and had only seen me post a lyric I'd put to music with Suno, so she was surprised and pleased to learn I record my own songs as well. Tammy herself is an avid user and advocate for AI music. There was no antagoni…
This one doesn't grab me. But you have certainly written a song about the hard problem of consciousness!
I do think it's hard to write a song about. As interesting as the concept is, what can you say about something no one understands? All …
I really like this. It may not be title track, but it's not filler. A tv sport or movie would be perfect, as you said.
I don't follow the nuances of every line, but I don't think that matters. What hits hard is the longing that comes thru. …
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