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@HummerWisdom - you're right, "humorous" is not at all the right word for such dark subject matter. But…
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Got yourself a humorous folk protest song in the vein of Phil Ochs. I actually think they playing and singing are perfectly suited to the song - raw suits it, while slickness might ruin it.
In my opinion the lyrics were pretty good for t…
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Nice one, man. Consistent story well told. Lots of familiar worries. I'm not a rap aficionado, but I do appreciate well-delivered bars and you've got some great ones in there.
"Put the addiction to bed now my kids not sleeping
Late…
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"And while I walk
I feel devoured
by the shadow of what can't be changed"
Those are some superb lyrics, Mora. Brava!
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@schmalex - I know what you mean. I debated starting with the chorus, but just didn't like it better than starting with the first verse. Then I tried putting it between the verses and it didn't feel right. So then it got placed at the end and th…
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I see something beautiful
I have to let 'em go
Great subject for a song, and you nailed a lot of aspects of the subject - nice one!
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@StoneFlowers - For me a fast song is one that's pretty much all written within a week. An average leng…
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Really great song...the straight forward lyrics are perfect for the feel of it all. I really like the sound of the double-tracked vocal - it works so well with the almost whisper-style performance.
I can sympathize with the post lock dow…
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There's a lot of really cool change-ups in the arrangement of this song - makes it quite dynamic. Nicely done!
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Thanks very much for listening, everyone.
@ChrisPrice - there are definitely drums there. Not too forwa…
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@sidshovel - I hope you didn't take offense at my mention of AI, because none was intended. I really appreciat…
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Great story, first of all. When an Allman comes to you in a dream, you listen!
The melody throughout the whole song takes unexpected twists and turns. Very inventive. I envy the unpredictability of it.
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Thanks for the feedback, everyone.
@sidshovel - I hear you. It's a pretty pedestrian rhyming scheme in t…
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Hilarious lyrics! No punches pulled 😀
Definitely tells a full story. I don't care for AI-created music so I only read the lyrics, but I imagine this would fit right into the '90s early '00s pop country vibe - Shania Twain would be all ove…
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This is gonna be a crazy mix of artists, but this brings to mind Iris Dement, Joan Baez, Laurie Anderson...and others. Very fun and interesting all the way through!
That ending is a heartbreaker 😥
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Did you write the melody, music and lyrics? Is that you singing? Would like to know more about what parts come from you.
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Very cool twist , having the title imply something sad and self-pitying and then the lyric actually taking it a totally different direction. I like that!
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Really cool guitar lick at the main refrain. Super catchy.
Also enjoy the vivid description of Penny (great title, by the way!) throughout the lyrics. My only suggestion is the same as Rainydayman's above: the main verse melody would bene…
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I've noticed it in other songs you've posted as well, but on this one particularly your voice reminds me of Richard Thompson.
I like this song - especially the line "Then at once the scene had changed". Isn't that just how it goes. I fi…
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Great job, man! Strong story and some powerful riffs to match it. I'm not at all fussed by the "out" and "out" rhyme, though I can sympathize with how long you probably spent trying to find a way around it. Sometimes it's so liberating to just…
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In the break you might consider switching away from keys to guitar or even a brass instrument just to change things up.Ooh, that's a good thought I wish I'd had! Well, i…
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Ah, thanks very much for the kind words, Sid 👍️
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Great groove and great imagery, but I think my favorite part is the guitar solo at around the 1:50 mark. Super slinky!
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I really like the lyrics of the chorus - the idea of writing a song in lieu of any other gift idea. That's great!
"Guys check me out, hold their girls a little tighter" is a great line as well.
Fun lyrics all around!
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Thanks for listening. Yes, I'm definitely guilty of crowding up my mixes - have a hard time knowing when to say when!
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@OutOfTowner - I'm pretty new to the forum, but your Lonely Bird song on this thread jumped out at me. I would bet we share some musical influences!
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Great song - brings back those young days in the highest trees. The "fly off a cliff" and "cowboy dream" lines make me think of Butch & Sundance 😃
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As interesting and atmospheric as ever, Mora! I really like the musical groove of this one...great slinky guitar playing towards the end that I first thought was a horn.
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"The plague of god spread over
The lands called the Spanish Main"
That's a hard-hitting line, there, and I like it a lot. Good lyrics.
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Great story song! Very fun to see the sights through your musical descriptions 😀
Howdy, Stranger!