Darkwood Green, (death of a town)
https://soundcloud.com/sidsshovel/darkwood-green-death-of-a-town?si=ddbce24913b54bf0a795240c1aaed46e&utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing (right click then open link in new tab,) to open song.
lyrics SS music/vocals Ai
This is the second in a showcase of five of my songs showing the diversity of the CW genre and its ability to absorb different styles. This, I believe, is an example of the storytelling style exemplified by such classics as "the gambler" and "coward of the county". Comments welcome on any aspect of CW.
[verse 1]
Darkwood Green was a nice place to live,
kids played in the park till the skies went dark.
Fun and laughter filled the sleepy town,
porch lights came on, when the sun went down.
[verse 2]
The day began just like, those that went before,
neighbours called out, through unlocked doors.
The rumour mill kicked in, went into overdrive,
a girl's body's been found, and she wasn't alive.
[refrain]
And the sun went down, on the death of a town.
[instrumental, 8 bars]
[verse 3 ]
Police siren's wail, sent shivers through the spine,
roads blocked, streets taped off, not a good sign.
Townsfolk in slippers, wore a mask of disbelief,
hugged each other tightly, shared a common grief.
[verse 4]
The Sheriff called a meeting, in the local church,
most came, some were helping with the search.
A drifter had been caught hiding behind a barn,
blood was on his hands, he showed no sign of harm.
[refrain]
And the sun went down on the death of a town.
[verse 5]
Darkness brought a silence, never heard before,
people fitted screens and heavy locks for doors.
Innocence was carried away, another victim of the crime,
The town would never be the same, for a long, long time.
[outro]
And the sun went down on the death of a town.
Comments
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Yep, that's a great story telling song.
I like how the rhyming scheme changes in lines 1 & 2 between verses 1 & 2. I'm not pointing that out to criticize, but as a lesson to others. Sometimes a little flexibility is a good thing to get a more natural feel, and listening or reading, it just flows without any bumps at all.
As a suggestion, when I got to the refrain my head went:
And the sun went down, yeah the sun went down, on the death of a town.
I think the mood of the lyric is a little darker than what the AI music generated here.
Great story!
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Sid, are you ok if I have a go at a different version of this?
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I'd be honoured, go for it and thank you
Sid
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And the sun went down, yeah the sun went down, on the death of a town.
The refrain is a lament on the loss, the "yeah" may distract, better "Oh"?
Sid
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I find it strange that the storytelling style seems to fit more naturally into the CW genre than it does say, the traditional or folk ones. For some reason, I think Folksy styles constrain the way the stories are told, not sure why, but may account for the strong similarities in the songs.
Sid
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I'll let you hear it first and we can decide then.
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You got it!
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Alright, here is an alternate version of the song that Sid and I have been working on:
https://soundcloud.com/rainydayman/darkwood-green-death-of-a-town
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