to love you I must leave you
https://audius.co/sidshovel/to-love-you-i-must-leave-you (right click then open link in new tab,) to open song. lyrics SS music/vocals Ai
Just finished reading a report this morning, about the surge in femicides, it appears the main reason given to police is the fear of losing their partners, weird, which naturally got me thinking.
[intro]
[verse 1]
I watch you dance and laugh out loud,
your partner, a distant uncle in his sixties.
I'm jealous of the way he holds your hand,
how you move to the beat of the band.
[verse 2]
My knuckles white, grip the napkin tight,
I know it's not right, but can't stop myself.
You suit the bridesmaid's dress, all in blue,
your every move, can't take my eyes off you.
[chorus]
I know to love you I must leave you,
If I stay, I'll kill your spirit and our love.
I can't bear the thought of sharing you,
Knowin' you're in my heart is not enough.
[verse 3]
My love for you has grown to an obsession,
I need to walk away now before it's too late.
You tell everyone my attention is so sweet,
a volcano, the pressure building underneath.
[chorus]
I know to love you I must leave you,
If I stay, I'll kill your spirit and our love.
I can't bear the thought of sharing you,
Knowin' you're in my heart isn't enough.
[bridge]
They say it's a kind of OCD, that's affecting me,
it's unlikely, that it will ever just go away.
Scared of what I've got, terrified of what I'll lose,
nothin' can be done, it's with me till my dyin' day.
[chorus]
I know to love you I must leave you,
If I stay, I'll kill your spirit and our love.
I can't bear the thought of sharing you,
Knowin' you're in my heart isn't enough.
[outro]
The note's on the table, she's out to see her mother,
each word tore my heart apart, I lied about another.
I pray you have a happy life and spare a thought for me.
It'll likely not be a kind one, but at least I set you free.
Comments
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That's an intense lyric. Would that more people were capable of setting someone free in this way.
I don't know if it should be "Knowin' you're in my heart" or "Knowin' I'm in your heart", and maybe either works.
If you needed to shorten it, there would be an option to use the outro as a bridge instead and end on the chorus. But I do think the current Bridge is adding meaning and value as is.
Tough subject!
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Thanks,
At the moment, I'm going through a phase of looking at age old themes from unique or at least different angles.
I have a list of hundreds of prompts I write down that form the basis for songs. I take each one in turn and write a song trying to come at it from an interesting and unlikely viewpoint. The song after this one was based on the common phrase, "I can only take so much" so I wrote about a shoplifter!
As you know, I love playing around with structures, the last few songs have, like this, looked at the role of the bridge as a development and the outro as a twist or conclusion, rather than a standard repeat and fade concept.
Writing for yourself allows you to do this and does throw up some interesting discussion points.
Yours are always really valuable insights and extremely useful as well as instructive, so keep them coming.
Thanks,
Sid
P.S. "Knowin' you're in my heart isn't enough," it's the physicality and presence he is obsessed with.
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Absolutely fantastic. Deep lyrics and meaning. Well done !0
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Very deep Sid. An emotive subject and you're so good at putting this into words.
As I was reading it I was trying to imagine what kind of music would fit. To be honest, I'm struggling a bit to know what direction it could take. I have checked out the AI but I won't bang on about that.
Fabulous words.
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Thanks Chris,
The music currently used is certainly not the best or even suitable for that matter. I can imagine something dark and soulful, circa Leonard Cohen. I would be really interested on your thoughts or anyone elses who might be reading this. I don't have a musical ear so any help from you string bashers would be most appreciated.
Thanks again.
Sid
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