The gift that keeps on giving
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[intro]
[verse 1]
"You're carrying a child."
The words hit me like a stone
For once in my miserable life
I would no longer be alone
[verse 2]
I was on a path to nowhere
A one-way ticket to hell
Looking up to the sky
from the bottom of a well
[chorus]
When I look at you, I see me
making my life worth living
Your everything I could have been
The gift that keeps on giving
[verse 3]
From that moment on
I never touched a thing
If I faltered, I rubbed my belly
Felt the trust of another being
[chorus]
When I look at you, I see me
making my life worth living
Your everything I could have been
The gift that keeps on giving
[verse 4]
I carried you for nine months,
now it's you who must carry me
You've saved me once already
I know you can do it again
[chorus]
When I look at you, I see me
making my life worth living
Your everything I could have been
The gift that keeps on giving
[bridge]
I wake up every morning
Thank God for another day
Feel the warmth of my baby
Who saved me when I strayed
[chorus]
When I look at you, I see me
making my life worth living
Your everything I could have been
The gift that keeps on giving
[outro]
The gift that keeps on giving
Comments
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Strong lyrics Sid. You are a fine wordsmith and this is very moving to say the least.
The Ai music works very well, though I'm not a fan of that vocal style. That's just me though. Others may love it.
I think it would be good to state that the music is Ai generated. Maybe create an Ai tag. Just my opinion and not a forum rule.
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Hi Chris,
Thanks for the feedback, appreciated. Re Ai, will do as you suggest.
Sid
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That chorus is very nice, but my fav line is:
Felt the trust of another being
I think a plaintive female vocal is right for the song, though the AI makes this one a little smeared out / blurry.
Good stuff.
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Appreciate the feedback RDM as always.
I'm not sure whether feedback on the Ai is relevant in my case at least. The process is so akin to "whack-a-mole" that any end result is pure luck rather than any design on my part. I view it solely as a vehicle to assist in the assessment of the lyrics. I'm sure a great many people find it an aid rather than hindrance but as to commentary on it's quality/suitability, it is too random to be of much use at the moment.
Comments?
Sid
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Understandable! I can refrain from commenting on that until there is at least some control over the output.
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Thanks RDM, even then, out of respect for the musicians on this forum, I would prefer no comment on Ai at all.
Music is something that is generated from the musicians own inner being, not some coder's algorithm.
Ai is a sound aid only to help appreciate the lyrics. I personally prefer it was not credited with any comments, good or bad.
This is a personal request and position and does not reflect on any other persons opinion or use of Ai.
Thank you for your understanding Owen.
Sid
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A fine piece and a moving tribute to how our children can help save us.
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