Desperate............. Do a little John Prine production on it I guess
If I could spin the bad world so it spun just right
Without strip malls kids be flying pretty kites
I'd sell my soul to anyone
Who ever showed up first
Half off sale off on the hurt
That's my desperate life I'm living in
Ch
I'm a rusty Rainbow trout
in a rocky stream
Aruging with my dreams
Yelling at reality
Right side up then
flat on my face
Feeling John Prine out of place
Cursing the human race
v2
If I could change her heart to still love me
Be D Beckham handsome so she'd see
I'd sell my soul to anyone
Who ever showed up first
Half off sale off on the hurt
That's my desperate life I'm living in
ch
v3
If I could turn back time to 20 years ago
Straight back to being about 6 years old
I'd sell my soul to to anyone
Who ever showed up first
Half off sale off on the hurt
That's my desperate life I'm living in
ch
Tag
I'd sell my soul to anyone
My desperate life I'm living in
The end
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Hi @ElvisNash
Delightfully grim. I'm struggling to think of any suggestions so for now I'll give you a thumbs up 👍️ and wish you the best with developing it into something special with the magical sounds you make.
Actually - do you often write lyric first or do you vary your writing method?
Cheers,
CCB
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its one add on the tag
I might risk being in Gods holy pocket
But still I'd sell my soul to anyone
Thats my desperate life I'm living in
I have the melody 2nd fret capo in G add 9 formation G add B bounce around on verses but it be in A , lets stick with the G the chorus starts in C , which is hard to hit vocally , i never play a straight up G chord , their boring . But its the key of A , 4 chord on chorus start off , counting on my fingers therory
But I think I can get it
Cheers
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I can't criticize anything here because my level of English is low... but I think you portray well that state of mind and personal perception in a world out of place @ElvisNash
Waiting for listening to your song!!!
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We sell our soul with one lie to survive , funny how that works , fight or flight
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https://soundcloud.com/elvisnash/desperat
Just G formation but in A# key 1234 cowboy. if you stayed up all night shooting wild dogs protecting sheep , You get a PHD on cowboy , If you went to Harvard , you get a GED on common sense . not much of it
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Minus the dog , Well you have to have a dog . that was Fred with 2 mil in the bank knocking wanting a jump on his junk truck . And his flip phone , Well his rich, i'm not
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Your guitar is openng the door to the music for the lyrics.... Waiting for the result!!! Your guitar sounds really warm.
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It works I think , see how I can spin production without getting to carried away , Keep it simple maybe , not sure yet
4 songs ahead of it , If i keep spending 80 bucks for a flea collar , It might be a month , For 80 bucks I could buy a horse and saddle . the dog rubs her butt on the carpet in circles , I'm not sure if its a fetish or fleas
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If I could spin the bad world so it spun just right
Without strip malls kids be flying colorful paper kites
I'd sell my soul to anyone
Who ever showed up first
Half off sale off on the hurt
That's my desperate life I'm living in
Ch
I'm a rusty Rainbow trout
Hooked in a rocky stream
Arguing with my dreams
Yelling at reality
Right side up then
flat on my face
Caught in rapids out of place
Cursing... the human race
v2
If I could change her heart to still love me
Be Brad Pitt handsome is that what she needs
I'd sell my soul to anyone
Who ever showed up first
Half off sale off on the hurt
That's my desperate life I'm living in
ch
v3
If I could turn that clock to 20 years ago
Straight back to being about 6 years old
I'd sell my soul to to anyone
Who ever showed up first
Half off sale off on the hurt
That's my desperate life I'm living in
ch
Tag
I'd risk being out of Gods pocket
But I'd sell my soul to anyone
Thats my desperate life I'm living in
https://soundcloud.com/elvisnash/desperate-life-for-vox_74bpm
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looking good elvis.
good hook in the trout. :)
but to make this song timeless
.would I leave brad out .or whatever name.never sell your soul to brad either.he just opend our eyes.
play it often then naturally grow into the shape that
it must be. good luck with it. I'm curious
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Brads current , He'll be around for awhile , He'll always be known for being handsome
I would sell my soul for the world to be right to get the girl back and to be 6 years old
Thats the whole point of the song , People are going to think I'd sell my soul to the devil for them 3 things to happen
When your desperate enough , Which happens quiet often in life , Thats if you've risked it enough
You will do anything to get out of that situation.
The business world has no empathy. Souls are sold all day long . Oh thats deep Elvis
Why don't say a few more things like the bible creates clinical depression
Should I buy Valluim from India
If you get divorced for the 4th time , Are they going to get any younger ?
I also made me cry writing it , I don't like to cry , I'd rather much write a sarcastic song , Quips of life so to speak
But I'll get thru it . Like why is my PGE bill $80000.00 a month bs like that . Pacific Gas and Electric , Should be called Al Capone Mafia .
If I could spin the bad world so it spun just right
Without strip malls kids be flying colorful kites
I'd sell my soul to anyone
Who ever showed up first
Half off sale off on the hurt
That's my desperate life I'm living in
Ch
I'm a rusty Rainbow trout
Hooked in a rocky stream
Arguing with my dreams
Yelling at that reality
Right side up then
flat on my face
Catch and release I need my space
Cursing run to ya die human race
v2
If I could change her heart to still love me
Be Brad Pitt handsome is that what she needs
I'd sell my soul to anyone
Who ever showed up first
Half off sale off on the hurt
That's my desperate life I'm living in
ch
v3
If I could turn that clock to 64 years ago
Straight back to being about 6 years old
I'd sell my soul to anyone
Who ever showed up first
Half off sale off on the hurt
That's my desperate life I'm living in
ch
Tag
I'd risk being out of Gods pocket
But I'd trade places with anyone
That's my desperate life I'm living in
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I'm curious if I live pass 80 , Well will see man . I think the dog looks at me to much
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Very pretty @ElvisNash Lovely combination of those guitars with the understated piano. I'm looking forward to how it all comes together. 👍️
CCB
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Well it had to go somewhere else with a v3 , Well see how it sings on the 13th and add harmony mix it right
thanks
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This has taken days for the right chorus
Now I got, So I'll sing this monday and not the other one
f I could spin the bad world so it spun just right
Without strip malls kids be flying colorful kites
I'd sell my soul to anyone
Who ever showed up first
Half off sale off on the hurt
That's my desperate life I'm living in
Ch
I'm a rusty Rainbow trout
Hooked in a rocky stream
Shaking off lures
Yelling at life's reality
Right side up then
flat on my face
Catch and release I need my space
Cursing swim upstream human rat race
v2
If I could change her heart to still love me
Be Brad Pitt handsome is that what she needs
I'd sell my soul to anyone
Who ever showed up first
Half off sale off on the hurt
That's my desperate life I'm living in
ch
v3
If I could turn clocks its been to many years ago
Straight back to being about 6 years old
I'd sell my soul to anyone
Who ever showed up first
Half off sale off on the hurt
That's my desperate life I'm living in
ch
Tag
I'd risk being out of Gods pocket
But I'd sell my soul to anyone
That's my desperate life I'm living in
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