Song: "Shoulda Never Listened"
https://soundcloud.com/hardtwistmusicsongwriter/shoulda-never-listened
Asking me to believe in you was cruel. . . it was cruel.
Shoulda never listened, I was a fool. I'm a fool.
Don't know what came over me.
A fool in love can hardly see.
A fool in love is easily victimized. Oh oh oh oh oh.
CHORUS:
Shoulda never listened. Shoulda never listened. Shoulda never listened to you.
Shoulda never listened. Shoulda never listened. It's true. oooh oooh.
Shoulda never listened. Shoulda never listened. Shoulda put up a better fight.
My friends all say "I told you so, and I know. . . they were right.
Shoulda never listened, baby I know. Shoulda never listened. Shoulda never listened.
Shoulda never listened I know.
VERSE 2:
Trusting you was never safe and I knew it.
Can't even say I didn't know better. I blew it. I blew it.
Totally irrational. Love makes us susceptible.
To decisions that look terrible in hindsight. Oh oh oh oh oh.,
CHORUS:
Shoulda never listened. Shoulda never listened. Shoulda never listened to you.
Shoulda never listened. Shoulda never listened. It's true. oooh oooh.
Shoulda never listened. Shoulda never listened. Shoulda put up a better fight.
My friends all say "I told you so, and I know. . . they were right.
Shoulda never listened, baby I know it. Shoulda never listened. Shoulda never listened.
Shoulda never listened I know it.
Comments
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This recorded in a bathroom? To me it sounds like there is an echo or heavily reverbed.
Also, The harmonies are off at one point, one of you is off key and a bit pitchy but could be just me.
You really loved this line - should never listened to me, it's oversaturated and loses its impact.
You've blended the verses and the chorus together, your essentially saying the same thing.
Strip the verses out reformat the chorus a bit and you have an excellent acid house beat :).
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Music is pretty dated , but I thought it was quiet catchy
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For me, it sounds good. The only thing I would change is a few words in the lyrics that kinda break the rhyme. I’d replace “victimized” and “susceptible” with words that are easier to sing.
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Not sure the doubled vocals are helping you in this one, just makes it a little less clear. I'd use them sparingly for the harmonies and the chorus.
In the chorus, I'd be tempted to change line 3. Introduce a little variety there without changing the overall pattern too much. Have the first phrase rhyme with "fight", then something else in the middle then ending in "fight" as you have it. So something more like:
Shoulda held tight, Shoulda held on. Should a put up a better fight"
But I like the melody, and the overall feel of it.
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This has a cool sixties and seventies vibe to me. Very reminiscent of some Neil Young songs, a few Beach Boys ones too. Good ambitious effort.
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Thank you for listening. I'll take your comments under advisement.
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Thank you for your input.
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Interestingly. . . there are no 'doubled vocals.' Just one line of vocals. Now the sound engineer might have put some reverb or echo on them. . . but there is just one line of vocals. I'll go listen hard to see if I can hear what you guys are hearing. I'll consider the lyrical suggestions. . . but I don't have access to the studio to go back and change it. I could run it through A.I. but . . . well you know.
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I actually have an "uncool" sixties and seventies mind when it comes to music. I'm told (I can't hear it, but others can) that everything I do has a "pre-Irish Folk" vibe to it. Thank you for the input.
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At 1:48 is where, to me, sounds like he added some effect. You don't need AI, just access to any DAW and you can edit that out or refine it.
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Good song, H... Love the hook 😎
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