It's a lotta things i regret
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Chorus]
I said
It’s a lotta things, a lotta things, a lotta things I regret
It’s a lotta things, a lotta things, a lotta things I regret
[Verse 1]
I should’ve gone to that party
I should’ve approached that girl
I should’ve asked her name
I should’ve talked to her all night
I should’ve asked for a date
I should’ve made it perfect
I should’ve called the next day
Love stories only happen in my mind
[Chorus]
I said
It’s a lotta things, a lotta things, a lotta things I regret
It’s a lotta things, a lotta things, a lotta things I regret
[Verse 2]
I should’ve asked for another date
Soon we would start to hang out
Now and then she’d come to my place
I would’ve put a ring on her finger
Then Start to call her my baby
Not so long, we’d start a family
And be happy for the rest of our lives
But, love stories only happen in my mind.
[Pre-Chorus]
Not so long, we’d start a family
And be happy for the rest of our lives
Love stories only happen in my mind
[Chorus]
I said
It’s a lotta things, a lotta things, a lotta things I regret
It’s a lotta things, a lotta things, a lotta things I regret
[Outro]
I should’ve been more brave
love stories only happen in my mind
I should’ve been more brave
love stories only happen in my mind
Yeah, I said
It’s a lotta things, a lotta things, a lotta things I regret
It’s a lotta things, a lotta things, a lotta things I regret
Comments
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grammar would suggest There's a lot things I regret
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What’s wrong with my grammar?
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I think Theirs is more correct , not its . its is not proper English
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Got it. You're right! I'll remove "it's" and just keep "a lotta things, a lotta things, a lotta things I regret"
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There are is proper , cuz things are plural
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What do you think about the first verse?
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it seems to work , its regrets and leads to your hook . I think you were at the party makes more sense , Then the regrets are more clear . You have to judge if your to redundant in first verse
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Just drop the 'It's' from the chorus.
I think there are too many I should've in the first verse, you can keep the first one then let it carry downward.
I should've gone to that party
approached that girl
asked her name
talked to her all night
asked for a date
made it perfect
called the next day
Love stories only happen in my mind
You could also drop the pre-chorus, as it's just a repeat of the end of the 2nd verse. it's s strong song and that will make it stronger
Keep or sweep, as I've been told :)
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Thanks for your feedback.
Yea, I thought about the first verse too. Sometimes I think it works like that, and then I think about changing it lol
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shorter lines make it more rapid.
you could remove it and see which one resonates :)
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The first line is a little long
I should’ve gone to that party
I should’ve approached that girl
Could be
I should’ve gone to that party
I should’ve got that girl
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Your v2 already said start a family . I think by then you get the girl and change last chorus . or it's just 3 minutes of regrets
Maybe it was all a dream and you have the girl and the family . But that would require a bridge
Or in v2 explain why your so shy maybe got dumped before . Right now v1 and v2 are laundry lists of regrets
My 2 cents anyway
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