Single Black Rose
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Another song I redid
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[Intro]
Standing at your grave
With this single black rose
On this warm summer's day
Struggling for any words
Never knowing what to say
[Verse 1]
I know I promised we'd connect
I'm sorry I didn't call
Never found moments of time
Wife, job, you know
[Verse 2]
Remember when we were teens?
I'll never forget the summers
Spent all day at the beach
Or cruisin top-down carefree
[Refrain]
This single black rose
Hung from your rear-view mirror
Now rests on your grave,(your grave)
This single black rose
[Verse 4]
We were tight in grade school
Then high school you met her
How she tore your heart open
You forgave her... I didn't
[Verse 5]
Also sorry I left your wedding,
Could have handled that better
But then, you know, the drinkin
What's done is done, I guess
[Verse 6]
Found out about your funeral online
Not surprised I wasn't told
Seems your parents never forgave
I understand why
[Refrain]
This single black rose
Hung from your rear-view mirror
Now rests on your grave,(your grave)
This single black rose
[Outro][Gentle fade out]
This single black rose, I kiss for the last time
Then walk away
Comments
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Morning Sunday Bill , real good story song man , I tell ya most people write pretty good on this site and few laughs
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Thanks Elvis. this an example of originally the wrong music choice, but I ran with it because...
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Well really its a story country song lyric , but your big on country
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it's started out that way, but then I was listening to manhattan's kiss and say goodbye and thought like that vibe, so I created the prompt, then 1/2 through this song thought, why does his voice sound sultry, then dawned on me that kiss and say goodbye was a song about ending an affair, matt and I are not gay, but then it hit me, what if the protagonist was in love with his best friend, I know tired cliche and been done. but that would give an interesting spin on the song :)
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One hint on lyrics no one is ever married and they say GF , no idea why that is , I think to relate to teenagers
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thanks for the tip,
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Good song.
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thanks
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Hey there B... love the lyrics. The music is a bit "happy" for the lack of a better descriptive. It seems to lack a drop of sad lamentation.
I guess it could be something sung and felt years after her death.
Don't get me wrong, it's not bad.... Just a bit confusing on a deeper level.
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Thanks Tom. welp. wasn't "Her" death, it was my friend matt who died at 32 when fighting a fire in the desert. inhaled dirt, got a brain eating worm. had other music, then tried, this and since it's based on a song about ending an affair. I changed the story :)
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Talk about a strong contrast between music and lyric! Though I will say it matched the warm summers day incongruity in the intro.
Mentioning the Wife in v1 jarred with me, as earlier it starts with I'm sorry we didn't connect. Implies he wanted an affair.
But overall that sense of a relationship that never quite made it comes thru loud and clear. I think most people are going to be able to connect with that. And the drinking, the wedding scene reference make it feel quite real. Flaws and bumps somehow seem more realistic!
"Hung from your rear-view mirror" is an interesting choice. Not sure if that is a symbolic choice, looking back sort of thing, but it also makes it feel like a specific actual event.
Not sure about the musical style, but the lyric feels strong.
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Thanks Owen, this is essentially two friends, one regretting his actions and then finding out about the friends death looks back in regret. the single black rose is the rose my friend hung on his rear-view mirror. it meant a lot to him to match his 64 bug. after i walked out of matt's wedding, we never spoke after that. I found out he died by looking up random people, his obit came up. To this day, i feel bad how i handled that.
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I'm not surprised to learn it's based on actual events - it definitely has that feel to it.
There are regrets that can't be done unfortunately. If we are lucky we can learn something from them.
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its a story song , so you need to come in with v1 . Unless you can beat the proven methods , I'd stick to the standards
You lost me with all that intro before story came in .
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thanks elvis
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in outlaw country speak, how would you set the scene of standing at your friend's grave, holding the rose that he had hanging from his rear-view. finding out his death years later by a random search on ancestry.com ;)
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You're not an outlaw . Use the kinda language you've been using . You can't use sensitive language , then switch it out of nowhere on some tuff cowboy . The main thing is to have it make sense . Fancy profound things are great , But making sense is first priority
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I could be an outlaw 😂actually wouldn't convert this one, I would use this as a premise, then make it outlaw :)
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Naw you don't have the outlaw lingo
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I don't have any lingo.. my lyrics are crap., can't figure out how to make them less crappy and less generic. but generic sells
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There not crap . You are telling the story . country music shows the story with descriptive words
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Thanksl
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Single black rose really is a country song hook , its been used before to describe darkness
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or a metaphor for woman, but not as a literal black rose. I this case, it's not a metaphor or symbolic in that sense. it's an actual rose that matt had hanging from his rear view. and this could be a country song it has all the tenants of one.
If you want to become great at anything, then you need to get outside your box.
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Out of the box ? the hook has been done several times. But everyone is old on forums and not in the real music business
So really does not matter
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It may have been done several times, but not from my angle, I looked it up. Out of the box means writing in a different genre. Not every body wants to be a hobbyist0
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Like I said it does not matter , No one is in music business on forums . Its a hobby , The real music business is complex
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both are true statements. so you're not in the music business? - No one is in music business on forums 😂
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To be in a real Music business you had that song demoed the cost would cost you $450 you would pitch it to a publisher. Your odds are about 15% acceptance rate.0
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My professional opinion the reason you would fall into 85% category cause that hook has been done already. Then you’d be a loss of $450 which is a business expense.0
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