Will You....?
Lyrics: Me | Music : Suno
My intent was to do 80s Alt/new wave/pop song along the lines of The Cure.
Regardless of how close I got to that I think as a song it turned out well, but you can let me know.
Thanks for listening.
https://suno.com/s/7XRwfcNsjQYug1A1
[verse 1]
The Granite feels so, cool beneath me
Wind through the trees, slowly breathing
Your voice whispers from yesterday
Echos off the rocky bank....
Your Beauty caught, on the wet surface
The comfort, in your warm promise....
(oh!)
[Chorus 1]
Will you , will you
Will you follow if I leave
Past the picture cliffs
Beyond the wood poppies
Will you, will you
Will you hold me as I go
Across the Rainy bridge
Won’t make it on my own
Will you...
Will you….
[Verse 2]
I hold you in my eyes, I want to stay
You meet my gaze, I look away....
My shadow stretches on the shore
Foot prints I won’t see anymore....
I'm Reaching out, but drifting further
My constant, My calm reminder .....
(Hey!)
[Chorus 2]
Will you , will you
Will you follow if I leave
Past the picture cliffs
Beyond the wood poppies
Will you, will you
Will you hold me as I go
Across the Rainy bridge
Won’t make it on my own
Will you...
Will you….
[Bridge]
It’s just me and you,
You made me who I am….
Alone and together,
Lead me by the hand….
It’s just me and you....
(Ohhh!)
[chorus final]
Will you , will you
Will you follow if I leave
Past the picture cliffs
Beyond the wood poppies
Will you, will you
Will you hold me as I go
Across the Rainy bridge
Won’t make it on my own
Will you...
Will you….
[outro]
Will you…be with me…
Will you…be with me...
Comments
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great song. perfect prompt for this song. some suggestions
Our hearts locked / I want to stay / you meet my gaze, I look away -> hearts beat in rhyme , you and me, sand in your toes, I'm adrift at sea. keeps the same sentiment and ties the beach metaphor from the start of the verse.
Replace I go across with we cross, and maybe replace rainy with weathered or drop it and leave it to the listener to decide the bridge they cross,
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This is great. This could easily be in the repertoire of any commercial band. I would listen.
Your voice whispers from yesterday
Nice line! I like the picture cliffs and the wood poppies too. Strong visuals and specific things to tie it down.
Will you , will you
Will you follow if I leave
That is so catchy! Strong hook. Not sure it works so well as a title. Doesn't quite grab the attention. You could go for something more like "The Granite" which is less central to the song, but maybe get someone interested?
I've listened a couple of times already and plan to do so again!
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thanks for the suggestions. 👍️ I did try them out, didn't decide to keep them but it did give me a better idea on a couple other lines, i'll post update later maybe. I was going for a layered meaning behind the song. on the surface it could be about a girl he is leaving behind. but in my mind he is personifying the beautiful place he has lived his whole life (on this lake) and he is questioning if leaving is going to change him as he sits there taking it all in one last time.
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That's a great angle
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Thank you! 😊 Im glad you like it.
new title, I'm open to it. i heard questions were supposed to make good titles, but maybe not in this case.
will you fallow?
will you be with me?
be with me.
if i leave
i'll have to think some more on it.
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I think I missed all of 80ties to a bad marriage and divorce
But its written well Muskie
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80s it was the best of times and it was the worst of times 😆
thank you sir 👍️
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Has that 80's Pop sound... You nailed it.
Sounds as good as Anything out there!!
A toe tapper, for sure.
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thank you, glad you liked it.🙂
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