“It Ain’t With Me”
Here is one of my latest songs I had covered. Any and all comments are welcome and first impressions are most appreciated
“It Ain’t With Me”
Words & Music by Thomas Tognaci
The lights are on, is there no one home?
I see a flickering light
Where have you gone? Am I on my own
with you high as a kite?
You’re always somewhere else, my darling
Somewhere lost in the stars
Maybe lost between our worlds
but wherever you are ….
it ain’t with me
The social scene with all its pretense
has always been something more you
The wolves convene and you jump the fence
to get a better view
You’re always there to spar, my darling
It’s never us, or we
It’s always you against the world
And, while you always agree ….
it ain’t with me
A once upon a long time ago
I fell for love and a face
We came undone in the undertow
and washed up in this place
You’re always to and fro, my darling
The changing tides, you say
You may come and go as you please
but if you come to stay
it ain’t with me
Comments
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Tom, I can't say anything is wrong with it. Sounds good. The only thing I might say is that the outro could be a bit long.
Best to you
Tex
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Hey Tom what's up ? lovely song and good writing
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Thanks guys!
This sounds especially good with earphones on!
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Nice! Strong driving beat. And a really solid lyric. Really like how v1 brings it immediately into focus. And the changing meanings around "It ain't me" - really polished.
Could be just me, but I think your own voice might suit this better. Perhaps you could redo just the vocal?
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This is one of those where I like my recording. But this production is on another level. My performance would play well in a coffee house... but this plays well everywhere.
There is a Female follow up to this song. It's a back and forth. This song reflects his side of things... Where as "While My Tears Turn Into Rain, reflects her side of the story. Here is her story: https://soundcloud.com/ironknee-877134982/1-while-my-tears-turn-into?si=0b5c51ce477c41909baa78239915ab8c&utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing
Thanks, Rainy!
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Tom, nice write on that one as well. Sounds good.
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Thanks!
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Tom, where is the track? I can't reach it!!! Deleted? Mientras tanto I can comment in your lyrics, really great, this line wake my imagination so much
"The wolves convene and you jump the fence
to get a better view "
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Hey Tom. Seems like the song is no longer available, which is a shame because based on the lyrics I would definitely want to hear it. I like the changing choruses, makes it feel like more of an unraveling story, like those classic singer-songwriter tunes, which is something you always do well. I also think it’s cool that we have the girl’s side to the story, though sadly that one also seems to be taken down.1
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