Seasons
Words - me, Music - Suno
https://suno.com/s/W69bMfqQPCh3BW5W
[Verse 1]
Springtime birds at play, during the day
Chirping crickets sing beneath the moonlight
Fond memories leaves on the family tree
thick roots grows as passing time flows
[Verse 2]
Summertime lazy days under sun's rays
Nights glowing campfires, never tire
Shifting warm sands, melt time's hands
Sand castles slowly crawl to fall's call
[Verse 3]
Golden leaves shed trees, the heat flees
Green grass sleeps, the summer sun weeps
Blue skies runs away, morphs muted grays
Days of festive fairs, scary nightmares
[Bridge]
Cold winter's breeze, icicled eaves
Fauna slumbers deep, sentiments we keep
From moments past, time forward cast
Seasons slowly shift, My soul drifts
[Outro]
Seasons come and go, ebb and flow
Like ocean tides, come and go
Souls are here, then are gone
Lost at night, absent in dawn
Through the years, then only one
Then only one, then only one
Comments
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It seems like the melody is much louder than the vocals and it's distracting me.
I don't understand the lyrics. It's over my head. :-(
I love the guitar playing!
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Thanks for the comment, I see what you mean..
does this work better? https://suno.com/s/munxwMXJyeuZDoPm
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Loved the song Bill, some beautiful visuals and lines in there.
You captured the season's changes in a wonderful mix of snapshots, one of my favourites:
"Sand castles slowly crawl to fall's call", charming!
I liked the comparison of the passing seasons with that of our loved ones themselves passing and souls changing.
I'm assuming the additional bridge and outro at the end is a Suno residual, rather than an intent since it doesn't appear in the lyrics on Suno or here.
I think it would benefit from a chorus instead of an end repetition, but nevertheless, a lovely song.
Sid
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@sidshovel - Glad you understood. I never know with my lyrics 😂.
Yes, it's a suno thing, but I left it as to me sounded good.
"Sand castles slowly crawl to fall's call", charming! i went back and forth with leaving "call" on or off.
Not sure about a chorus since this is linear due to the seasonality, thanks for the suggestion :)
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its a pretty AAABA song on seasons passing
Nice job Bill
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@ElvisNash - thanks Elvis
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Yes, this is much better! I love it!!
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Cool. wish I could write as direct as you.
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The song really pivots at the outro, and that's a good thing. A "season's passing" theme is nice, but this is more meaningful.
You've got the "family tree" mentioned in v1, and maybe the "sand castles" in V2 refers to childhood passing, but I would like to see some family reference in each verse to really get that "ah ha!" moment at the end.
This one is understated, subtle. I like it.
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@RainyDayMan - I started with the outro, then built the other verses around it.
The sand castle is more about time moving on into fall than childhood refence, although I see that now. it's started out as an hour glass with sand, but it's summer.
I see your point about referencing the family in each verse. although I just had an epiphany, rather than it being about my family, each season is an episode in my growth.
spring - newborn; summer - child/teen; fall - adult; winter - current age
I'm reworking the outro as I have it, the ebb and flow should pair with the ocean.
thanks for the suggestion :)
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Cool! Looking forward to the next version!
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