"Alleluia... (How You Saved Me From Myself)"
Hi all, here's a new lyric. Before I record, I would like any and all comments while first impressions are most welcome. Thanks!
"Alleluia... (How You Saved Me From Myself)"
By Tom Tognaci
I’m surely not the best of men; I stumble and I fall
Try as I may, I find myself at the foot of some brick wall
It’s something I can’t get over; in my nature, I guess
Or maybe it’s something deeper, keeping me from doing my best
Alleluia… the sun began to shine
Alleluia… when your heart found mine
I’m a sinner, a tramp, and full of pride
But you pulled me over… over that wall to the other side
Alleluia, Alleluia, how you saved me from myself
Alleluia, Alleluia, how you saved me from myself
Since then, I’ve walked that crooked line much straighter than before
But I have to say, the narrow path is a balancing act, for sure
Precariously, I teeter; some habits are hard to break
I know you’ve had cause to leave me if it weren’t for Heaven’s sake
Alleluia… oh, how the sun does shine
Alleluia… keeping your heart close to mine
Lost and wandering, but never on my own
How you steered me over that winding road I had always known
Alleluia, Alleluia, how you saved me from myself
Alleluia, Alleluia, how you saved me from myself
How you saved me from myself
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It’s a worn theme girl saves boy
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It may be well worn... but the title is unique, as it is not a title found on Youtube or on any search engine.
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Thats all that matters a fresh hook
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I'm still trying to rub out any unnecessary cliches 😏
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its pretty good Tom
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PfDcHtkmKhk
2025 song , pretty good details and way he swing lyrics
Kinda in your lane on content
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Looking good Tom!
As a thought you might try varying the 2nd Alleluia line just slightly in the chorus:
Alleluia, Alleluia, how you saved me from myself
Alleluia, Alleluia, you saved me from myself
How you saved me from myself
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That's a real good song
Thanks Rainy...
Have a good suggestion for a rhyme with "myself"?
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Well, what I was referring to was removing the "how" at the start of the 2nd line, rather than changing the end.
If you do want to change the last word, probably have to go for a near rhyme. "Felt" seems like it might have possibilities.
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"Alleluia, Alleluia, how you saved me from myself
Alleluia, Alleluia, you saved me from myself
How you saved me from myself"
Not a bad idea, Rainy. I'll sleep on it!!
Thanks!
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I like the idea of eliminating the first "how" in the chorus, and then to leave it in place thereafter. I like it as part of the lyrical hook, and it helps in making a good title, as well.
Thanks, Rainy!
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No worries!
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Why would I worry ? 😉
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