The Deal
Thanks to Sidshovel, I have made my first AI song. His encouragement has changed my views on the use of AI. So without further delay, here's The Deal.
THE DEAL
Verse 1
I've got demons in my pocket,
monkey's on my back
body's wracked in torment
feels like I'm on a rack
Verse 2
devils got it in for me,
he lurks round every tur
never should've made the deal,
my soul will surely bur
Chorus
Empty and alone.
I'll be tortured at his whim.
in the lake of fire,
I'll be forced to sink or swim.
Verse 3
Every day's a struggle just to make it through.
Foolish wager made, now the debt it due.
If I think the pain I feel is truly agonized.
Wait until I burn in hell, I'll have no good reprise.
Chorus
Empty and alone.
I'll be tortured at his whim.
In the lake of fire,
I'll be forced to sink or swim.
Outro
Isn't there a way to break the contract seal?
Rewrite the wording now or make a brand new deal?
Comments
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That is an excellent song, good ole fashioned Rocker. No excuses why you can't do more.
I am surprised how well it transited across from poem to rock, live an' learn!
one comment, verse 3 differs significantly in length to 1 and 2.
Try to maintain similar lengths to assist the musicians, (bless their cotton socks).
Pay attention to others feedback too, especially RDM.
Loved it,
Let's have some more
Sid
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I think this is why I want to learn the theory so I can compose lyrics and not poetry. I am gonna guess that this has to do the the number of syllable inside each line where the musician needs to compress it all into a smaller space to fit into the other lyrics? too many meters within the bar?
If I were to split the verse into smaller sections like this would it make it better for the musician or is it simply the number of lines within the verse not being equal to the other verses?
Every day's a struggle
just to make it through.
Foolish wager made,
now the debt it due.
If I think the pain I feel
is truly agonized.
Wait until I burn in hell,
I'll have no good reprise.
I too was very surprised at the results of this transition. I appreciate your encouragement and persuasive comments on using it.
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RDM, or Chris are much better qualified to explain this. One of them will pick this up and explain.
Sid
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I continue to be amazed at how far AI has come in such a short time. Yet even so, there's still so much human input behind the scenes in terms of crafting the prompts and everything, so I will never hold it against those who do use AI because I can only imagine how much work it is to get it to sound just the way you want.
All that said, this sounds really good. I agree with Sid about the third verse, but will also wait for RDM's input. He always gives great analysis on lyrics so I'm sure he can explain it best.
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I guess I'm trying to understand the reason why it doesn't 'fit' into the music so I can not do it again.
I feel as if I am attempting to draw a picture without opening my eyes when formatting my lyrics. I know how to draw and can conceptualize the image I want, I have the pencil and paper but can't see it to draw it.
Where are you RDM? lol Take me to school
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That came out well!
"Sink or swim" could be another title here if you were looking for one.
The outro feels like it should have something following The AI has put a chorus after this again, which works fine, but if it was truly an outro , it would kind of leave things hanging.
Yes, syllable counts should be fairly even across similar lines in different verses. There's always a little wiggle room, and sometimes you can use slurs or just squash them in, but it's easier if they're of similar length in terms of syllables. So line 1 of verse 1 should be within 1 or 2 syllables of line 1 of verse 2 etc.
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@RainyDayMan yes, I see this being done in rap songs where they stretch or cut the word to make it fit.
That must be a pain in the rear for the singer performer.
As far as the outro, that is all AI generated and I have minimal control over it at the present time. Partly due to lack of suno parameters and their proper usage but also due to my lack of understanding music itself and the nuances of it.
Ironic that I have such a distaste for AI in areas of creation but have use of it to portray my internal sound for my lyrics.
Am I a hypocrite? Lol0 -
It is a tool for improvement, think of it like a spirit level, you keep testing till you get it right.
With respect to the outro, this reversal back to verse 3 is a common anomaly.
For more control and stability, do this, change the section names to this:
[verse] to [exposition]
[chorus] to [hook]
[bridge] to [drop]
[final hook] to [final chorus]
intro, outro remain the same
Here's a good link for research
Hope this helps.
Sid
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Nice link! Thanks for sharing will see how this does.
It's all trial and error for this app.0
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