The musician
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lyrics SS music/vocals Ai
For my friend, the musician
[intro]
[verse 1]
Rain beat on the window of his room,
the musician ran his hand through his hair.
Gazing at the rain-soaked crowd below,
he drew comfort in the touch of his cello.
[verse 2]
Many things had gone bad recently,
a victim of the orchestra's cuts.
Twenty years he'd sat in the strings,
now he listened from the wings.
[chorus]
Music was a place of no more pain,
beyond where only worries reigned.
thoughts focused on the sound,
his body gently rose off the ground.
[verse 3]
Worries he left in some distant world,
far from those orchestral notes.
This place once of halcyon days,
that carried him up and away.
[chorus]
Music was a place of no more pain,
beyond where only worries reigned.
thoughts focused on the sound,
his body gently rose off the ground.
[verse 4]
The musician smiled when he realised,
his world could not be broached.
Creations from his hands were pure,
every note rang true and sure.
[chorus]
Music was a place of no more pain,
beyond where only worries reigned.
thoughts focused on the sound,
his body gently rose off the ground.
[bridge]
His cello was his loyal friend,
it had never let him down.
Be there till the very end,
in the clouds or on the mound.
[chorus]
Music was a place of no more pain,
beyond where only worries reigned.
thoughts focused on the sound,
his body gently rose off the ground.
[outro]
The musician watched the crowd,
drift silently through the rain.
Placed his cello on the stand,
there was no longer any pain.
Comments
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again fancy words in it like "reigned" and "halcyon".
am i too common for this forum, lol
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Using simpler words and structures is sound advice for anyone looking for mass appeal, and especially commercial success - it simply broadens the base of potential listeners, and increases the chances for success. Though there will always be exceptions: "Scaramouche, Scaramouche, will you do the Fandango?"
For anyone writing primarily for their own creative pleasure, all bets are off. There is a wide landscape of potential styles to choose from and the question becomes: how well can you execute that style?
In my observation Sid is a wordsmith choosing each word carefully to pack in the most meaning, sometimes with multiple layers that you only find after multiple reads. That's going to result in using less common words and phrases. The audience for that wordplay is likely to be a smaller niche, but, speaking only for myself, finding any audience is a bonus!
I really like the opening visuals in this song - the musician in his room running his hands through his hair whilst rain beats on the window outside. It takes me into the room with him.
And for similar reasons I'm less keen on v2 - it's too expository and less visual for me.
The concept of heaven as music is a good and original one, I like that. I think many people will empathize with that to some degree, and will extrapolate that for the musician it could be ideal.
Not sure about that final line. Maybe something about taking a final bow?
It's an unusual and intriguing song. Good stuff.
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