our final, loving walk together
https://audius.co/sidshovel/one-final-loving-walk-together (right click then open link in new tab,) to open song.
lyrics SS music/vocals Ai
Earlier today, I read an article on the BBC about a couple in the Netherlands who underwent duo-euthanasia, they had been married for fifty years, very moving.
[intro]
[verse 1]
The day was like any other, except it wasn't,
we'd planned this special day for a long time.
Today will be the last, our life will have past.
I reached for your hand, you put yours in mine.
[verse 2]
Our family were all here, gathered 'round,
children danced about, we wanted it that way.
We told them we were goin' on holiday,
and that they would understand one day.
[chorus]
Spoke of hiking trails, in sun and even hail
Where we're goin' there's no bad weather
I can see and Mary's legs will work again.
Once we take our final, loving walk together
[verse 3]
Fifty years of marriage, I wish I had fifty more
ups and downs, through wars and peace
hardships we both faced, overcame the pain
struggled in the famine, blossomed in the feast.
[chorus]
Spoke of hiking trails, in sun and even hail
Where we're goin' there's no bad weather
I can see and Mary's legs will work again.
Once we take our final, loving walk together
[bridge]
Lived our life as one, you've always been my pride,
hand in hand we'll face the light, walking side by side
As the sun sets for the last time on this world of ours
I pray for one last second, I can look into your eyes.
[chorus]
Spoke of hiking trails, in sun and even hail
Where we're goin' there's no bad weather
I can see and Mary's legs will work again.
Once we take our final, loving walk together
[outro]
Once we take our final, loving walk together
Once we take our final, loving walk together
Comments
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That is a moving story, and one to make you pause and think.
The lyric is worthy of it. I like the details of the hiking, gives a real sense of their life together.
"Once we take our final, loving walk together" is a beautiful line and of course ties back to the hikes.
As a suggestion you might swap "I can see" for "I'll be able to see", I don't think there would be any issue fitting that in.
I know you're less interested in comments on the AI music, but I think it really got this one right.
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Thank you,
I realised after I posted it these two lines needed more work
"I can see and Mary's legs will work again.
Once we take our final, loving walk together"
There is potential confusion, what's clear in the mind, is not the same on paper!
Ignore what I said re Ai comments, you are the best source for newbie songwriters out there and I make no apologies for plagiarising all the advice you give.
Sid
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