Another view of the blues
Recently, I did a collab with RDM, a blues/jazz number, RDM claimed it was "dirty blues". Intrigued, I wanted to try a "clean blues" number, this is it. You gotta listen on SoundCloud to get the feel.
[intro instrumental 16 bars]
[verse 1]
I thought I knew, what sadness was,
I'd been singin' 'bout, all my life.
Broken dreams, and found ideals,
Till God came, and took away my wife.
[chorus]
I've never felt so down, hardly know which way is up.
A month of being on my own, a lifetime without you.
Baby, I ain't livin', I'm breathin' but I'm dyin' on my feet.
Losing you, gave me, another view of the blues.
[verse 2]
There's all those little simple things,
you left just lyin' 'round the house.
A pair of shoes, a glass half drunk,
The scarf I bought, you didn't use.
[chorus]
I've never felt so down, hardly know which way is up.
A month of being on my own, a lifetime without you.
Baby, I ain't livin', I'm breathin' but I'm dyin' on my feet.
Losing you, gave me, another view of the blues.
[verse 3]
There'll be no time, I can let you go,
no place, where I can lay my head.
Loneliest place, in this world of grief,
is when I'm, lying without you in bed.
[chorus]
I've never felt so down, hardly know which way is up.
A month of being on my own, a lifetime without you.
Baby, I ain't livin', I'm breathin' but I'm dyin' on my feet.
Losing you, gave me, another view of the blues.
[bridge]
A massive heart attack, took you away from me,
like you, I sing with a broken heart, for all the world to see.
[chorus]
I've never felt so down, hardly know which way is up.
A month of being on my own, a lifetime without you.
Baby, I ain't livin', I'm breathin' but I'm dyin' on my feet.
Losing you, gave me, another view of the blues.
[outro]
Losing you, gave me, another view of the blues.
Losing you, gave me, another view of the blues.
another view of the blues.
view of the blues.
Losing you, gave me, another view of the blues.
[Fade to End]
additional music and vocals on Soundcloud, Sid Shovel
Comments
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Nice write Sid! That chorus in particular works really well, love lines 1 and 3!
There's a slight disconnect from V1 "my wife" to the rest of the song "you". It's not drastic, but you might consider making v1 "you" as well. It's there for the setup, but I think the idea of loss would come through strongly anyway.
AI did a good job on the music. Definitely a bluesy feel, almost leaning towards gospel. I enjoyed the listen as well as the read 😁
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Good spot, you know every time I played the original, two words kept ringing bells, wife and massive. I really need to get into the habit of listening to my brain more, instead of letting it run!
[verse 1]
I thought I knew, what sadness was,
I'd been singin' 'bout, all my days.
Broken dreams, and found ideals,
Till God came, and took you away.
[bridge]
The heart attack was sudden, an' took you away from me,
like you, I sing with a broken heart, for all the world to see.
Apologies for misquoting Quasi, "the bells, the bells."
Sid
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Nice and smooth!
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yep glad you fixed that bridge. Great lyrics0
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