Little Lost Boy
Hi if these lyrics give anyone an idea, please go ahead and use them.
Little Lost Boy
I may travel all, over the world
spend my life, chasing pretty girls
trying to show that I'm in control
and that I'm not a damaged, soulll
Chorus
But deep inside, I'm trying to hide
that little boy, who told lies
just to belong, to Dylans gang
who cried, when he lost his lovely gran
I put on the charm, I've learnt all the chat
but some of the girls, they see right through me
they smile, as they walk away
and say, -your a little lost boy
Chorus
But deep inside, I'm trying to hide
that little boy, who told lies
just to belong to Dylans gang
who cried, when he lost his lovely gran
And deep down inside, I know that they're right
when I'm alone, I can't sleep without light
Oh, I know all the jokes, I can dazzle old folks
but on my own, I'm a little lost boy
I may travel all, over the world
spend my life, chasing pretty girls
trying to show that I'm in control
and that I'm not a damaged, soulll
Chorus
But deep inside, I'm trying to hide
that little boy, who told lies
just to belong to Dylans gang
who cried, when he lost his lovely gran
I may travel all, over the world
spend my life, chasing pretty girls
but inside, I'm a little lost boy
but inside, I'm a little lost boy
but inside, I'm a little lost boy
but inside, I'm a little lost boy
Comments
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I like the mood of this, but it doesn't quite feel settled to me.
It's interesting that you use the "little boy lost" to end some of the verses. It would be more common to see that as the final line in the chorus where it gets more emphasis - but there's nothing wrong with being different! The main thing is that you use it repeatedly since it's your hook and title.
These lines:
just to belong to Dylans gang
who cried, when he lost his lovely gran
don't feel like they belong in the chorus to me. I think they're good, and should be in the song, but they're descriptive of things that have happened, whereas the chorus (to me) is more about who the singer is. But you don't need to agree! It's your song
Lots of worthwhile stuff in here.
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Thanks I appreciate the feedback Owen, I might have a play around with it
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Little Lost Boy (Edit)
V1
I travelled all, over the world
spent my life, chasing pretty girls
trying to show that I was in control
and that I weren't a damaged, soulll
Pre
I was a little lost boy, who broke people's hearts
I didn't really care, about no one
Chorus
But deep inside, I was trying to hide
that little lost boy, who told lies
(Gap)
the little lost boy, who cried when gran died
and didn't want, the world to see
V2
I joined Dylan's gang
to show I weren't soft
and before long, I was a stranger
putting myself in danger
Pre
I was a little lost boy, who broke people's hearts
I didn't really care, about no one
Chorus
But deep inside, I was trying to hide
that little lost boy, who told lies
(Gap)
the little lost boy, who cried when gran died
and didn't want, the world to see
V3
I put on the charm, I'd learnt all the chat
but some of the girls, they saw right through me
they smile, as they walked away
and say, you're a little lost boy
Pre
I was a little lost boy, who broke people's hearts
I didn't really care, about no one
Chorus
But deep inside, I was trying to hide
that little lost boy, who told lies
(Gap)
the little lost boy, who cried when gran died
and didn't want, the world to see
( slower)
Then one long night, she appeared
saying - let it go, let it go - don't be angry
(Slower)
I awoke with wet eyes
ashamed that I'd cried
but knew, what I had to do
V4
I went down the church
kneeled on a perch
and asked the Lord to forgive me
to set, the little lost boy free
Chorus
But deep inside, I was trying to hide
that little lost boy, who told lies
(Gap)
the little lost boy, who cried when gran died
and didn't want, the world to see
Fades
But deep inside, I was trying to hide
that little lost boy, who told lies
(Gap)
the little lost boy, who cried when gran died
and didn't want, the world to see
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Hi I've made a recording giving an idea of the melody, if anyone wants to take it on further.
It's very basic
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I think V2 is tighter than V1, good job there!
And the recording is definitely helpful to understand the mood and the melody you are going for.
As a suggestion, in the chorus you might swap the word order around on these lines:
that little lost boy, who told lies
(Gap)
the little lost boy, who cried when gran died
to use "little boy lost" the first time then "lost little boy" the second. But there are also advantages in repeating the same phrase to really hammer it home - so your call on that one.
And I like that revised phrase "who cried when gran died", that internal rhyme, and how succinct it is now.
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Thanks , appreciate your comments x
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Hi Owen thanks, you might be right about swapping
that little lost boy, who told lies
(Gap)
that little lost boy, who cried when gran died
Around to
the little lost boy, who cried when gran died
Gap
that little lost boy, who told lies
I think I would keep little lost boy, rather than l using little boy lost as it feels like repeating it has more impact
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Cool! As I said to someone else a minute ago, these suggestions are just like me saying "Have you thought about..." but you should always go with what feels right to you.
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If I was working on this song I'd maybe consider singing verses 1 & 2 back to back before going into the chorus. I couldn't really hear your recording very clearly so I was just using my imagination. As Owen says, it has to be what's right for you, but I'm just throwing an idea about.
Hopefully someone will help you bring this alive. The words are really strong.
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Thanks Chris, any suggestions on what is best the best tablet/iPad to get a better recording - my Android fire is very poor as you can probably tell..
After looking at it again, I like the suggestion about verses 1 and 2, as it helps develops the story before you go into the chorus
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I had a go at a 're-write after playing around on my guitar
taking on board some of your suggestions.
Little Lost Boy
I travelled all, over the world
spent my life, chasing pretty girls
trying to show that I was in control
and that I weren't a damaged, soulll
I joined Dylan's gang
to show I weren't soft
and before long, I was a stranger
putting myself in danger
I was a little lost boy, who broke people's hearts
I didn't really care, about no one
I was a little lost boy, who broke people's hearts
I didn't really care, about no one
Chorus
But deep inside, I was trying to hide
that little lost boy, who told lies
that little lost boy, who cried when gran died
and didn't want, the world to see
I put on the charm, I'd learnt all the chat
but some of the girls, saw right through me
they'd smile,- as they walked away
and say, you're a little lost boy
I was a little lost boy, who broke people's hearts
I didn't really care, about no one
I was a little lost boy, who broke people's hearts
I didn't really care, about no one
Chorus
But deep inside, I was trying to hide
that little lost boy who, told lies
that little lost boy, who cried when gran died
and didn't want, the world to see
(Slow)
Then one long night, she appeared
saying - let it go, let it go - don't be angry
(Slow)
I awoke with wet eyes
ashamed that I'd cried
but knew, what I had to
I was a little lost boy, who broke people's hearts
I didn't really care, about no one
I was a little lost boy, who broke people's hearts
I didn't really care, about no one
I went down the church
kneeled on a perch
and asked the Lord to forgive me
to set, the little lost boy free
Chorus
But deep inside, I was trying to hide
that little lost boy who, told lies
that little lost boy, who cried when gran died
and didn't want, the world to see
Fades out
But deep inside, I was trying to hide
that little lost boy who, told lies
that little lost boy, who cried when gran died
and didn't want, the world to see
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