Barrier

KatiesPRIDE

I don't know where this comes from, I know that my mum loved me; but we were never a luvy duvy family, and I think lots of sons and mums have the same kind of relationship.

It's more of a poem than a song I think, there's no chorus but I hope it tells a story

Barrier 

There's a picture of me 

on my mothers wall

of me when I was three foot tall

it hangs over the radiator 

in her old fashioned hall

the carpets the same 

from when I was a lad

my wife doesn't understand

she says " It's not so bad ! "

she says I should go more 

as my mum won't always be there

It must come across

that I don't really care 

I limit my visits 

cos I find it too hard

there's unspoken words

that have created deep scars 

I know it hurts my mum

that I don't go more

I can see it in her eyes

as I come out her door

there's a plea in her face

as she tries to smile

I stumble in my mind

on her doorstep tiles

even though I'm outside 

I'm struggling to breathe

I want to get away 

I just need to leave

she's still standing there 

as I look from the car

both of us screaming

being pulled apart

I'm halfway down the road

when I pull to one side

tilt my head back

and I start to cry 

neither of us

can say how we really feel

so this is how it is

like an unwritten deal

Katie Wilson

ChrisPrice

I can relate to the mum/son thing. I know my mum loved me too and she was very kind to me, but we weren't really what you'd call close either. I wish I'd got to know her better really, but she is sadly no longer with us.

You put your feeling into words very well. As you say, perhaps more of a poem than a song in it's present form. Perhaps this could go well with an acoustic guitar. Might be worth looking for a collaborator. I won't volunteer as my acoustic guitar playing is nothing special.

Nice lyrics Katie.

RainyDayMan

This really pulls on the heartstrings. Tons of emotion.

As a poem it stands as is.

As a song, I think it needs something to center around. Maybe a chorus to return to like:

both of us screaming

being pulled apart

I gotta get away

But we're tied at the heart

or something like that.

KatiesPRIDE

Thanks I will look at it, as the idea is to get a song out of it