I ain't afraid of sharks

ThatGiantOne

https://soundcloud.com/that-giant-one/i-ain_t-afraid-of-sharks?si=596cc9877a264445b57b1048ace7e363&utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing

Should i finish this song or let it go?

[chorus]

I ain't afraid of sharks

I swear I could beat them in a fight.

The fire in my soul

keeps me awake in the night

They don’t know my name

But they love to criticize

If I sign that deal

I bet they’ll apologize

[Verse 1]

Doesn’t matter what you do, everybody’s gonna talk

So why not go for it if you know how it ends?

If you're lucky, you’ll live long enough to grow old

Life goes fast, you can check it in the mirror

So why would you worry about the little things?

It makes no sense, every day new advice

from people who don't know shit about your life.

[Chorus]

I ain't afraid of sharks

I swear I could beat them in a fight

The fire in my soul

Keeps me awake in the night.

They don’t know my name

But they love to criticize

If I get that deal

I bet they’ll apologize

bhengen

https://www.thesongwritersforum.com/vanilla/discussion/2489/i-aint-afraid-of-sharks

I'd run with it. it has good structure.

RainyDayMan

Overall I think it's got legs.

Good strong rhythm, and the lyric fits the cadence. Hangs together.

I like your "I ain't afraid of sharks" line, we get to interpret that as the verse unfolds.

Not sure about "If I sign that deal". It comes out of nowhere and seems to be referencing something outside the song. It doesn't seem tied to anything else there. I'm guessing your intent is "if I become successful" and I'd head more in that direction.

But otherwise - keep going!

ThatGiantOne

https://www.thesongwritersforum.com/vanilla/discussion/comment/19270#Comment_19270

Thanks! I’ll post the final version soon

ThatGiantOne

https://www.thesongwritersforum.com/vanilla/discussion/comment/19278#Comment_19278

Thanks! Yea, the "deal" represents success