The Charms
Sounds like Dylan lol
First one wore a silver cross
Said it kept the devil off my back
Kissed me slow before a show
Said, “Baby, you ain’t that bad”
She’d flick that lighter in the dark
Like she could spark my fate
I swore her touch was rabbit’s foot luck
Every time I hit that stage
(Lift musically)
Thought she was my lucky charm
Till luck ran dry and she did too
Verse 2
Second one had emerald eyes
Said green meant money and grace
Laid her head against my heart
Like she owned that place
Kept a horseshoe over the door
Said, “Bad winds won’t blow through here”
But storms don’t knock, they kick things in
Then disappear
(Lift musically)
Yeah I called her my four-leaf clover
She folded when the cards turned cold
Verse 3
Third one laughed at superstition
Said fate’s just whiskey talk
Burned sage in my old kitchen
Barefoot on the porch at dark
She said, “You don’t need no talisman
You just need someone who’ll stay”
But staying’s harder than believing
In magic anyway
(Bigger lift)
I thought she might be different
But even good ones walk away
Bridge (strip it down)
Turns out luck ain’t love at all
It’s just hope dressed up in perfume
Final Verse (Play this like a CHORUS musically — biggest lift)
Then you showed up quiet
No silver, no smoke, no signs
No emerald promises
No lucky-number lines
You didn’t hang above the doorway
Didn’t dangle from a chain
You just stood there when the thunder came
And didn’t change
(Hit this hard)
You ain’t a charm I carry
You’re the one who stayed
Yeah all that superstition faded
When you didn’t walk away
Tag — repeat for hook feel:
You’re the only lucky charm
That ever stayed
Comments
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Very cool hearing this preformed by living people. little different feel than the Suno version.
Does sound like Dylon. haha 😄
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What a concept a human lol0
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I like this line - You’re the only lucky charm / That ever stayed
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Sounds like Phil Spectre on steroids0
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Thought he was, or something :)
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I unburied him for the song , He apologized for killing that girl . you know Phil stop thinking with your pecker . Ya think Elvis
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This is the worse song I ever heard , thats what get for doing a god damn love song
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it's not bad. better than a lot of others. you tell a story. it's an outlaw love song. if you don't like this angle, you could aways. change the meaning of the song to talk about your balls, call them your lucky charms 😂
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Naw I'll resing it , Its AAABC stucture , it has to go up vocally somewhere , it's not now . ha ha ha my balls . might be better then bullshit love songs , whats your visa number . Funny they love you alot more with money , Well makes sense , who wants a loser lol
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Naw dumped the whole track , starting over just acoustically , This sounds like shit
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https://www.mixcloud.com/ElvisNash/charms-take-2/
Now its at least better , But I'll never do a all verse song again
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Sounds good to me. what's the issue with doing an all verse song
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No chorus
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I get that. but why specifically you don't like songs without chorus's
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its not I don't like it , Its hard to make each verse different . AAABA
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Why not add a refrain,?
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It has a bridge , thats all thats needed , it's at 337 radio time . or so
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I missed that. I see now :)
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Harmony is a bit hot , I'll remix , then to vid . Elvis Nash Artist
https://www.youtube.com/@ElvisNash/videos
I still think you could create a channel , it's really easy . Just make it plain its AI songs
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Cool
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Like Kramer would say its going straight to vid
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I took some advice from Muse writers . So I trashed the wall of sound tracks . Made it simple and reusing it
That cost me another $75.00 studio time and $177.00 for background singers from Africa
This song will cost me $1000.00 with a vid being made . Thats why I only record one every month or so ,
What will be my competion . Majors and AI songs
How do I feel competing agaist AI songs on Youtube
I feel it fraud they are not the artist
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Nice. Liked these lines:
Laid her head against my heart
Like she owned that place
I like the motif, and the story structure. But it feels like V3 should be the final woman. Having a good one walk away doesn't add to the story line (to me!). The not believing in lucky charms feels like it should be the resolution and turning point in the song.
But overall it's a good one!
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That would make the 3rd one the lucky charm , I broke the cliche and made the 4th one the lucky charm
That was the whole point of song killing cliches . The forth one was the lucky charm , not the 3rd
Now it has to mixed right
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to make this song different in every section I copied his production ideas
For some reason the vocal did not make to Nashville to tune it
But it will and final mix will come , then go to vid and promotion
I will only make Adsense money every year on the song
The LLC was canceled on Elvis Nash , I did not want to deal with corp taxes
I imagine if you were a major player the LLC would be a good idea
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Song is complete and final mix
Now time to move to next song , after paying off balance to Nashville
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Suno is just a map , then you change it up in the studio
I do not sound like Dylan lol
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