Mourning Sun
Words - Me; Music - Suno
https://suno.com/s/cro7PXcaOhqJXHAh
Got the idea from JgKojac's song. Running backwards - this was a great line- I think I'm in darkness / I'm standing in the midday sun begat standing in darkness in the midday sun begat standing in darkness before the morning sun begat standing in darkness before the mourning sun. about a life that was taken too soon.
I got the idea for mourning based on William-Adolphe Bouguereau. The First Mourning — Adam and Eve over the body of Abel, William painted after the death of one of his sons
Rather than base it on the painting, I based it on my own life experience, when my younger sister passed away at 35 in her sleep. It's actually a much sadder story; I'll leave it at that. She had plans before a botched surgery. I imagine myself standing in the room the next day. the bridge is the phone call I rec'd from her 3 months before she died. She wasn't happy Sandi; she was Angry Sandi. her system was shutting down, and she asked me if I could give her a kidney, I said sure, but knowing that wouldn't save her.
Then the line: Finish what she started, worked because my sister could never finish what she started.so I changed it to she couldn't finish what she started. seemed fitting :)
[Verse 1]
Kneeling in a room of blues and grays
Next to where she once laid
A clock hangs on the wall
No longer chimes at all
[Verse 2]
Scattered books on the floor
Papers full of hopeful dreams
Old photo tacked to the wall
Memories of us small
[Chorus][Echo Effect][Layered Vocals]
She couldn't finish what she started
Lives left shattered, broken-hearted
Standing in darkness, before the mourning sun
Standing in darkness, before the mourning sun
Standing in darkness, before the mourning sun
[Build up]
[Bridge]
The room's burning red
Head filled with words said
The brutal futility
What you asked of me
Never became reality
(Never became reality)
[Drop]
[Outro]
She never finished what she started
A photo held close to my heart
Standing in darkness, before the mourning sun
Standing in darkness, before the mourning sun
Standing in darkness, before the mourning sun
Comments
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You did good on this one. Congrats.
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Thanks :)
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Upload it on Youtube,
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I don't have a YouTube channel. yet. at some. point, but not right now. thanks
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well done. knowing the backstory really makes this strong. verse 1 and 2 really good, not a lot of words but they carry the weight.
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Thanks Muskie. That is what the point I was making in your song. you've already established the rough weather conditions. spake on the lake, still holds that, but when you add rough, you're now telling people not showing people or letting your words paint the picture.
There are still issues with these, but I'll come back later and clean them up
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There's a depth of despair captured here. That quiet opening with the echoed vocals and piano (?) is like a death knell.
Less sure about the techno beat towards the end but the start is heavy as hell.
And "mourning sun" is a great play on words.
I was glad to see Sid had posted a comment on Suno too. Glad you guys are still in contact!
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Thanks Owen. Not really contact, we only speak when he comments :)
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