I Love the Liquor More

MPDudash

I know, I know. It’s along the same line as the last post, but many times they come to me like that and hopefully one day one will work. Adding commas and pauses so as to possibly make it a little more understanding, as to how I hear it, lyrically. Started this yesterday and just finished it up.

I Love the Liquor More

My decor, is empty walls, a tv, and one reclining chair
The front doors, like a gate to hell, where mem’ries, lie heavy in…the air
Each window leaks a breath of hope, but the smokes, got me falling down.. the stairs
Is there a message, in those twelve steps, I don’t know, but you can bet that I don’t care…

I love the liquor more
More than I ever loved, myself
Sold my soul at the crossroads, three years
Past the age of twelve

The consequence is dying
But somehow, it seems the only cure
I’m looking up at rock bottom…I guess
I love the liquor more

Depressions not set in, truth is, it’s reality, I hate…
Some blame the whiskey, but me, I know it’s fate
Been high for so long now, sobriety is too much of, a chore…
Think I’ll try to find redemption, but I’m afraid…
I love the liquor more

I love the liquor more
More than I ever loved myself
Sold my soul at the crossroads, three years
Past the age of twelve

The consequence is dying
But somehow, it seems the only cure
I’m looking up at rock bottom, I guess
I love the liquor more

Maybe I can find redemption
Start a new life
Turn every wrong into a right
I’ll try…..

My hands shook at Sunday service, till I, found respite in the wine
The seeds of the sermon, planted doubt, fueling helplessness inside
So I reach under my chair, pulled out my .44
The barrel tastes like powder, like those hundred times before…..and once more

I loved the liquor more
More than I ever loved myself
Sold my soul at the crossroads, thee years
Past the age of twelve

If the consequence is dying
I’m still waiting for the cure……
I’m looking up at rock bottom
Guess I…..love the liquor more

©️2023

RainyDayMan

Wow! That's a beauty. Very powerful.

I love the rhythm of that first verse. The longer length of the lines just adds to it.

And the imagery is like a film noir scene.

"The barrel tastes like powder, like those hundred times before…..and once more" that is so intense.

Strong chorus. Especially the first and last couplets. Not sure about using "If the consequence..." it feels like a passive way to structure that line, though I like the meaning.

This one could be something special.

ElvisNash

This is real good , At home I pulled out my .44

The barrel tastes like powder, like those hundred times before…..and once more

Since you were in church hearing this sermon, Now back at home

MPDudash

Thanks for looking, Owen. It’s always funny to me because on another post someone commented that the lines didn’t work. I actually feel pretty good about this one other than the pathetic attempt at a bridge. I sometimes think people forget how people like George Jones could turn three syllables into 5. I was thinking about the consequence change and that can be done easy enough.

Elvis, thanks for looking. I was unsure about the transition back home but was hoping the seeds of the sermon are what he was pondering before he went back home? I could probably add back home to that line to change it up.

MoraAmaroLaLoba

Really great lyrics, deep, moving!

gabe

I love a lyric that paints a lived in space. Vivid and haunting, fascinating and familiar, so personal and relatable it's slightly unsettling. Well done.

ElvisNash

https://www.thesongwritersforum.com/vanilla/discussion/comment/2023#Comment_2023

usually it has to be spelled out , Back at home , now its like you pulled out a gun at church , The chair is not necessary

Here comes the great line , At Home I pulled out my mag .44. So it works and makes sense

You could say ,Back at this lonely house I'm pulling out my mag 44

pretty easy fix

ElvisNash

Just for the sake of disscusion , What if you switched around last chorus

I'm, sick of consequences of dying

Will AAA gave me a cure .........

I’m tired of looking at rock bottom

Do I really love the liquor more

preaching to the choir on last chorus , opened ended did this guy turn out alight ?

ElvisNash

Some contrast on end, since whole song is dealing with addiction , A slight solution, kinda

MPDudash

Mora, thank you!
Gave, appreciate the compliment. I am also in Ohio, eastern part.
Elvis, appreciate the suggestions. I may look to make some changes at the end.