A.I. May I?
A.I. May I? (Lewczyk/Tornblom)
The boy is guided from above
Under the guise of maternal love
Making sure he can’t be hurt
Mother’s boy behind her skirt
In no way shall he be exposed
No boyish prank, no bloody nose
No scabby knee, no dirty clothes
Mother, may I go out to play?
Mother, may I? It’s a sunny day.
In the shadows of a darkened sky
All the crew will shout: “Aye, aye!”
The captain’s stare surveys the deck
Who will he blame if they get wrecked?
No one escapes his scrutiny
No chance of any mutiny
Only his might is their unity
Captain, may I stay ashore today?
Captain, may I? It’s a stormy day.
Under the gaze of a silent drone
Angelic eye that protects its own
Secret data that tracks your score
Lets you know if you get more
Smartly tethered to your phone
Them the makers, us the clones
“We guarantee you won’t be alone.”
A.I., may I go out to play?
A.I., may I negotiate my pay?
A.I., may I know what I can say?
A.I., may I stay alive today?
Comments
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This reminds me of 'enter sandman" a bit. I like the urgent beat. Metallica might tackle that subject matter too
Interesting guitar parts sounds kinda like an indian scale, the solo sounds like that too.
Different for sure. Good track.
I suspect everybody will be writing AI themed songs, cause it's such a trendy subject now.0 -
@DullRoar - Superb, so neatly done :) I like the production and the way you have stamped the AI theme in the very last verse of the tune. The first one starts with "mother" being the guardian while the boy is young, and in the second one "the captain" is the mentor as the boy becomes a man and enters the world with his work in life and the third verse replaces all human connection with the AI reference, the AI being the supreme controller of life making all his decisions for him. Excellent and interesting take I have to say
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One of the better takes I have seen/heard on the subject, mostly because the message is presented so simply. "AI, May I" is a great hook. In a way, it's a pity it only appears at the end, although I understand why. Maybe you could add a short outro of guitar interspersed with three or four repetition of the phrase?
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Good track! Tight lyric and music.
The ending is quite abrupt, and you may want that to emphasize that last line of lyric, but I was hoping for maybe a bit of guitar there and a loop around around on the final chorus - bit like Gavin.
Well done indeed.
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HOla,
A little disturbing. I like the parts that sound exotic and oriental. They give the story a mysterious, undulating feel. The ending puzzled me a little, but, well, I think I'm always puzzled.
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It is without question an interesting concept. I'm not sure what the point you are making is, but it's an absolutely interesting lyric.
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