I May Be Down But I Ain't Out

HummerWisdom

Hello Songsters! This song, I feel could be sped up a bit. Please let me know if you agree and any suggestions are welcome.

For a listen ==> https://soundcloud.com/reneelachapelle/i-may-down-but-i-aint-out

I MAY BE DOWN BUT I AINT OUT

V1

I may be sad

May be angry

I may be mad

Downright crazy

I may be poor

Destitute

Pullin’ a cord

No parachute

 

[Chorus]

I may be down but I ain’t out

‘Cuz I still got a heart to give

I may be down but I ain’t out

‘Cuz I still got a life to live

 

V2

I may be tired

Countin’ sheep

Uninspired

In neck deep

But I got a brain

Know how to use it

No hurricane

Makes me lose it

 

[Chorus]

I may be down but I ain’t out

‘Cuz I still got a heart to give

I may be down but I ain’t out

‘Cuz I still got a life to live

 

V3

No thank you, doc

Keep your pills

Got wood to knock

And rolling hills

Got Mary Jane

For a breather

This runaway train

Is a Believer

 

[Chorus]

I may be down but I ain’t out

‘Cuz I still got a heart to give

I may be down but I ain’t out

‘Cuz I still got a life to live –

Got a life to live, oooh-oooh, oooh-oooh, a-ha..

I may be down but I ain’t out

‘Cuz I still got a heart to give

I may be down but I ain’t out

‘Cuz I still got a life to live

 

[Tag]

I may be down but I ain’t out

I may be down but I ain’t out

I may be down but I ain’t out..

 

© 2025 Renee La Chapelle – All Rights Reserved

 

bhengen

@HummerWisdom - the tempo is fine. maybe a bit more anthemic, since it has a powerful message

ElvisNash

Sounds good Renee , tempo is fine

sidshovel

Lovely song Renee, got it just right I believe

TammyB

Renee- I really love the lyrics, and I can relate. The message, the positivity, and confidence to say, "keep your head up." Back in the days we used to say, "keep on keepin' on."

I agree with everyone, the tempo is good.

I would like to hear more of your vocals; it seems like the guitar is distracting me because it's much louder than your vocals. I also would like a tad bit rougher on the chorus, I know you can do it. You are probably tired of me saying, "rougher" but it's your vocals that make me say it. lol. Tina Turner is an example of "rougher." :-)

Overall, this is a really good song, and I want you to get the max from it. 😊

RainyDayMan

Tempo feels good to me. Might be a bit rushed if you speed it up.

I like the vibe and feel of it. Bill mentioned an anthem and it does have that powerful, uplifting feel.

Good stuff.

HummerWisdom

Thanks so much, everyone for you honest comments, suggestions, opinions.

Appreciate you very much!

Renee