Watch, the leaves float by
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[verse 1]
Reflect, on times gone by,
this warm, an' sunny day.
Decisions, I made in life,
what if, I went another way.
[verse 2]
Would things be different,
my world, have changed me.
Maybe, it didn't all happen,
an' different, to what you see.
[chorus]
Watch, the leaves float by,
along the river's edge.
Sails past, makin' for the sea,
it's destiny, a metaphor for me.
[verse 3]
So many dangers, on the journey,
not knowin', if you go no more.
Tangled up, in shallow reeds,
perils, along the river's shore.
[chorus]
Watch, the leaves float by,
along the river's edge.
Sails past, makin' for the sea,
it's destiny, a metaphor for me.
[verse 4]
Trapped in the rocks, detritus the end,
forgotten, the tree that bore your kin.
Cast out to suffer, the shame of failure,
learn the lessons of life, to sink or swim.
[chorus]
Watch, the leaves float by,
along the river's edge.
Sails past, makin' for the sea,
it's destiny, a metaphor for me.
[bridge]
Lie on it's banks, the river flows,
where, will my destiny take me.
Wonderin' do we, truely know,
what's ahead, if we reach the sea.
[final chorus]
Watch, the leaves float by,
along the river's edge.
Sails past, makin' for the sea,
it's destiny, a metaphor for me.
[outro]
The water, moves like time,
always, in one direction.
These things, they never change,
just like, my own reflections.
Comments
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@sidshovel - very philosophical. just depends on if you believe in determinism or non-determinism. Very well put together.. sometimes I wish I was the leaf floating down the river ;)
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circa 1970, River Cherwell, Oxford Uni, crazy days, another song.
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I reckon you could append the bridge to the chorus and make it twice as long. As is stands, I don't feel like it quite got its message across, but with the bridge part it feels more complete.
I like the music you've chosen, it's got that lazy, floating feeling to it that fits the lyric.
I'd try something else in V4. It's lost that conversational tone that the rest of the lyric has. Plus "detritus" is a horrible word to sing. And it's a bit darker too.
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@RainyDayMan, thanks for the feedback, as ever appreciated. Agree with v.4 and detritus, pass on combining bridge and chorus, shifts it from lazy relections to deep philosophical, not the feel I'm looking for.
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No problem!
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Yeah pondering our own mortality song , We do that more often getting older
Sounds good Sid
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I like the song, Sid
I only have one suggestion: as it’s quite obvious that you are using metaphors, it sound a bit redundant to specify it…anyway, it’a a minimal question!0 -
Thanks Elvis, the reflections were of a time when I was barely nineteen, so I think Bill's determinism is probably closer to the truth.
@Skandha, thank you, good question! For most commentators, that line would indeed appear to be redundant, we are however, writing in theory for a public audience. This is turn, requires some adjustment to clarify certain points, we cannot assume the majority of the public would/should immediately grasp that which other songwriters/lyricists would find obvious.
Sid
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That’s true Sid, maybe it is even better your choice if you wanted to be clear for most people!0
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