Lucid dreams

bhengen

The title may change.
Wrote this after listening to linkin park. Chester was certainly troubled.
Song’s about questioning existence.
Verse 1-questioning purpose / finding meaning, verse 2 - questioning faith, verse 3 - question direction, bridge - coming to terms, outro- the end.
The chorus was written intentionally to be paradoxical. Wasn’t trying to be overly profound or witty :)
Lyrics by me, music vocals Suno

https://suno.com/song/d0c0f8ea-30f7-4ad0-9da4-d6f4f4b59513

[Verse 1]
In a misty field of greens and yellows
Pursuing white rabbits down moody holes
Multitudes layered folded recess in time
Bygone evaporating memories now shoal

[Chorus]
Dreamt this morning lucidly dreamt
Dreaming I was awake while Dreaming
Vividly cogent dreams cogent vividly
Surreal ethereal dense ethereal surreal

[Verse 2]
Mimicry baahing amidst fleeced flocks
Drinking divine blood from golden bowls
Perplexed heretical parables and paradoxes
Dissension spawns unholy devoured souls

[Chorus]
Dreamt this morning lucidly dreamt
Dreaming I was awake while Dreaming
Vividly cogent dreams cogent vividly
Surreal ethereal dense ethereal surreal

[Verse 3]
Snaking road ends forked prongs of three
At crossroad of determinism in decisions
Blind obedience salvation or inner peace
Tortured soul perpetually locked prisons

[Chorus]
Dreamt this morning lucidly dreamt
Dreaming I was awake while Dreaming
Vividly cogent dreams cogent vividly
Surreal ethereal dense ethereal surreal

[Bridge]
Dreams ebb and flow floating on open seas
Waves distorting altering true realities
Wet sand slips crumbles inner peace lost
Currents in time past boundaries crossed

[Outro]
Restful serenity skin muted in grayish whites
Shrieking vultures devour lifeless remains
Hands of time melt merge morphing quanta
Dreamlike existentiality causal astral planes

RainyDayMan

I've seen poems before where a latter verse helps explain / interpret earlier verses. I'm wondering if you could use that idea here.

Have the bridge be something like:

Questioning meaning, questioning faith

Seeking direction in life enchained

Dreams ebb and flow floating on open seas

Waves distorting altering true realities

sidshovel

One of those that's way over my philistine head Bill. Not the frst time, an' won't be surprised, if it's not the last.

Enjoyed the music/vocals though.

Keep punchin'

Sid

bhengen

@RainyDayMan -the outro is death. I could change the bridge to verse 4 then incorporate your changes in the outro. @sidshovel, thanks. I knew this was really abstract which is why I put the outline of each stanza

ElvisNash

The magic poetry Bill , Sounds great man . No suggests from , your way above my pay grade

bhengen

I don’t think the title is correct.

bhengen

@ElvisNash . Thanks

bhengen

@RainyDayMan -sorry misread your message. That would work in the bridge