Just A Kid
Hey girl, was wondering if you could help me with this one. I really like the way this song turned out but...it's written from a boy perspective. What was it like when you were a kid? I mean a girl kid? Maybe add some lyrics. I'm gone skiing for a few days so won't be able to get back to you but..please have at it.
Go fly your kite babe...
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@StoneFlowers while I appreciate you asking, you don't wanna know what it was like to be me as a little girl. I was adopted and a rough adoption at that, so practically from the day I was born I was a rebel-child. I think you got this one on your own! Listening now. Lyric would be helpful. Rode my bike AND flew my kite, tho'!! 😍
Happy skiing!! ⛷️
Renee
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Oh well add to it if something hits you:
Don’t you remember You were a kid
Fast as a bird you could outrun the wind
Swim in the creek dive in the waves
You were bullet proof in your puppy days
They picked you up twirled you around
So light on your feet so far off the ground
The sun was so bright the world was so loud
You looked up dreamed your way to the clouds
That’s what you did...you were a kid
Break
Didn’t hear what people said
Yeah whatever you were a kid
played in the rain moved like a cat
Throwin rocks in your baseball cap
Barked like a dog wrestled your friends
Skipping stones to the ocean’s end
That’s what you did...you were a kid
turn around
Don’t you remember you’re just a kid
The time is right go hop on your bike
The time is here fly your kite without fear
Don’t you forget the things that you did
Don’t you remember you’re just kid
Aaaaahahh ah just a kid
Aaaaahahh you’re just a kid
That’s what I said...you’re still a kid
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@StoneFlowers Thanks again for asking me to help out with your song. I wonder if you might use the idea of your character visiting his/her parents and they see him/her as a kid still. Something he/she still does that reminds the parents or mother or father that he/she is still a kid...at heart. I hope this helps.
You're probably hitting the slopes by now, have fun! ⛷️
Renee
Something like the following:
Now, it's Thanksgiving day
Pushin' your little brother out of the way
For that bigger piece of cherry pie
You're still the apple of granny's eye
You're just a big kid
Like when you were a kid
Do I get a 'T' for trying? 😍
EARLY TEEN YEARS:
Longin' for that 'T' for tryin'
Oh, how Mary-Jane left you dyin'
Flyin' higher than a kite
The only way to win the fight
Brokenhearted kid
Doin' what kids did
Packed up your things one day
Thought about runnin' away
Played "Seasons in the Sun"
Til that record player was done
Losin' your lid
Trapped inside a kid
I'll leave it there; running out of edit time and running late for work! But the pleasure was all mine. Use it or some of it or not, no hard feelings.
Your friend,
Renee
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Cool concept, one that most everyone who is grown can relate to. Those carefree days for most people, back before the bills that came had your name on them. I like what you have going on this one Stoney, I only have one suggestion, and it could just be me being me, but I would change the word puppy for younger. Good writing, and your guitar work is even better.
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@StoneFlowers
………continued from previous post @StoneFlowers Driving to work, the following came to mind for a chorus:
Go ride that bike
Go fly that kite
As if you were a kid
Go ski that slope
Don’t give up hope
As if you were a kid
💃 Renee1
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