Two wrongs don't make a right
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[intro]
[verse 1]
Ours was an open marriage,
at least, that's what we said.
Fact was, we both had affairs,
didn't even share a bed.
[verse 2]
We cheated on each other,
had secret lovers for years.
Now that it's all ended,
all's left, are crocodile tears.
[chorus]
Two wrongs don't make a right,
Didn't even think they might.
When you taste forbidden fruit.
The first casualty, is the truth.
[verse 3]
It makes no sense to break up,
we're both equally to blame.
Our marriage is a train wreck,
after treatin' it like a game.
[chorus]
Two wrongs don't make a right,
Didn't even think they might.
When you taste forbidden fruit.
The first casualty is the truth.
[verse 4]
No lovers and no friends,
only those here for the ride.
Not wantin' anythin' serious,
just somethin' on the side.
[chorus]
Two wrongs don't make a right,
Didn't even think they might.
When you taste forbidden fruit.
The first casualty is the truth.
[bridge]
Love's embers, have long gone out,
grey ashes, are all that remain.
The cremation of passion complete,
what we've got left, is just a stain.
[final chorus]
Two wrongs don't make a right,
Didn't even think they might.
When you taste forbidden fruit.
The first casualty is the truth.
[outro]
When you taste forbidden fruit,
The first casualty is the truth.
Damage done, try as you might,
Two wrongs won't make a right.
Comments
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@sidshovel - I like these lyrics.. do you think that didn't even think they might sounds better than don't even thin they might? Just my thoughts,
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Yeah, you're right Bill. flows better, thanks mate
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As was I reading this I was considering what kind of music might suit it and thought something a bit jazzy and sultry, and that's not far from what you've got.
I think you could combine V4 with the chorus, double the length. Feels like it would flow quite smoothly.
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if they agreed on a open marriage ,Im not sure what all the drama would be , that's open marriage sex with other partners But sounds good
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if you think on business perspective , What artist is going to sing about that ? its very unfavorable light
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I like the structure of the first verse a lot, it's a trick I try to do when writing where the first line ends in 2 syllables and the next with one, and if I can make the first line rhyme with the third, and the 2nd with the 4th even better.
The music and meter are good for the subject matter.
I was thinking when I listened that one line in the chorus seemed rushed, so I counted the syllables. It may sound better if you wrote.
The first casualties the truth 7
Two wrongs don't make a right, 7
Didn't even think they might. 7
When you taste forbidden fruit. 7
The first casualty is the truth. 8
Just my 2 cents, keep it or sweep it.
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Hey,
I love the chorus you came up with. That’s a real good image.
I wondered a bit about vers 2, cause if the marriage is an open one, how or why „cheat secret on each other“? Maybe it’s just me and anyway I do like the rest of it.
Btw this expression „train wreck“, I read it a lot lately…but can anyone pls give me a real explanation of the meaning behind?! Thanks!
Keep up the good work
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Train wreck is used when something goes horribly wrong , But since the couple are in a open marriage , its not train wreck , Except the artist career if he sang that in public , that would be train wreck singing to the public we've had tons of affairs , Unless your Will Smith
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Thanks for the comments guys most appreciated,
The first casualties the truth 7, absolutely right, good spot. Thanks.
"Train wreck", apart from it's literal sense, also means a terrible mess or disaster.
"open marriage", I can see how this can be confusing, I was aiming to show that even in this so called, "open" relationship they both found the need to cheat on each other with secret partners. But I take your point.
Thanks,
Sid
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Thanks Elvis and Sid!0
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Lyrics are really good: you don’t find frequently such sincerity in a song. You can really enter for a moment in character’s life, without tinsels and with simple words.
Music well fit to the mood.0 -
Glad you enjoyed the song Skandha, appreciate your comments.
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Well even if it was a open marriage , in the end it be a train wreck , So that works , Why bother getting married
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