Dull

OutOfTowner

Here is something I've recently finished. The songwriting and lyrics weren't really a big focal point, I was more trying to put down something simple to work on mixing. I recently mic'd up my drums and was trying to get levels right, still not quite what I was wanting so still some work on the setup and mixing. Anyways let me know what you think, I'm open to any sort of feedback on lyrics, structure etc.

https://soundcloud.com/thatdamnalex/dull?si=e008a6d4f5194a559d987b29f6ab9e52&utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing

Lyrics:

Somethings got your nose

Quite the sturdy hold

Says don't you know

You're running out of fight

The cops are on patrol

Picking on the poor

Says don't you know

You're not coming home tonight

The rhythm of the rain

Reminds you of the train

That took you home

In the middle of the night

The man who holds the rope

Is reining in the choke

So that you know

Who really runs the fight

You gotta roll over, over

Come inside its cold

You think that when you're old

You'll get it right

Like someone else's life

40 rounds to go

Your back befriends the rope

Says don't you know

You'll give 'em hell tonight

You gotta roll over, over

Barry

That was really cool, had a Beatles vibe to it to me. Have you thought of adding the roll over line after "In the middle of the night"?

sidshovel

Lovely song, enjoyed this very much, well sung and performed.

"Your back befriends the rope"

If ever, one line captured a paragraph!

Excellent piece of work,

Thank you for sharing.

Sid

ChrisPrice

John Lennon, post Beatles is how I hear this. Even the production sounds period correct. I'd perhaps consider turning up the vocals a bit. Otherwise, I really enjoyed this. A great song and a really good arrangement.😀