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Nice slice of life song. Vivid. I like it. Have you thought of adding some traffic sound effects? Easy to do with free clips to be found on the web.
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Not sure that Suno really does justice to this. Maybe I'm just jaded from all the AI, but it seems to upbeat for the depressing subject. Some good lines in there, as always.
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I like the lush strings effect from the keyboard. I'm afraid I have to agree that the chorus is a little repetitive.
I don't know that anyone would say that a gentle breeze is brewing. A storm brews, but not a breeze. How about, "There's a …
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The free version of SoundCloud is OK, but you can't replace sound files. So, if you upload something and get some feedback that persuades you to change something, you can't. You have to delete the track and upload it again, meaning it will have a…
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Hey, I'm not suggesting abandoning the rhyme - just finding a better one that says more and doesn't seem forced :)
Not every line in every song has to rhyme, but I'm one of those old-fashioned types who thinks it's almost always better when…
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This is basically a good lyric imo. It puts us inside your (or the singer's) head. I felt like I was thinking along with her. It has an honesty and an intimacy that drew me in. Not many lyrics do that.
There are a couple of lines that I'm n…
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@sidshovel Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. You've encouraged me to keep working on it ☺️
Wow, that was not the musical treatment I expected when I read the lyric. It works for me, though. "I'm a proud mama" is a nice hook. That's the line I remember after listening. Simple lines are often the best, especially when expressing an emoti…
Well worth doing jus…
Well, that was fun. very catchy and some amusing lines. Not sure where the gerbil comes from 🤔.
Well done, Owen, I think anyone, regardless of their political views can appreciate that it's a well written song. A lot of interesting metaphors. The simple musical treatment is a strength, in my opinion. This feels more like folk than country, …
It's a really fun melody - well done Suno! 😀
And well done to you too. I mostly like the lyric. For me some of the liberties with grammar don't quite come off, but most of them do. One I would definitely change is in the first line. As writ…
Many thanks to Owen and Bill. I know how frustrating this kind of thing can be.
That's a really good lyric, Carroll. I did something similar in a song while ago, turning depression into a character, although I actually addressed the character directly. I think the verse about depression is the best. It's a realistic depictio…
I like it. A good story, even if it's a well-worn path. It could maybe be condensed a little. It's a bit long at five and a half minutes.
I think Sid and Elvis are right. There is probably a very limited audience for a song like this, relying as it does for its appeal on recognition, in English. I could be wrong. Maybe there is a subculture, as there is for anime. Otherwise, writin…
Thanks Owen. That li…
Thanks, Elvis. I hav…
Thanks. I had not ma…
The lyric held my attention all the way through and the music is a good fit. Really good idea to write from the Mexican perspective. There are plenty of songs, films, etc. from the Texan side. This gives it a more universal "horrors of war" feeli…
Nice loose bluesy feel to this. It took me a while to tune into the vibe, but I enjoyed it when I did. I think it could maybe benefit from being just a little bit faster, but that's a minor thing.
I like the lyric. Some lines that could be very funny when sung, particularly the one about Tourettes. That's my favorite line. It does paint a vivid picture.
I think I might change Sadie's name to something more amusing and memorable than …
Nice wistful vibe. A tone of regret in your voice. You do that so well.
Some great lines that say a lot with a few words:
"Life started at happy hour ended closing time"
"But her phone went dark and he left her flat"
Good …
Nice. I agree with all the things Owen likes about the lyric.
Nice bouncy melody, although for me the chorus is maybe a bit too similar to the verse.
Good work, as always, Elvis. I love the hook. Thanks for the step-by-step description of the process. I arrived too late to hear the earlier versions, but the one I just listened to sounds pretty darned good!
I can see how a home studio could work really well for EDM. No issues with correct positioning of mics, etc. and the acoustic environment doesn't really matter when it's all electronic anyway. Maybe the vocals would benefit from a professional st…
Not my kind of music, but I have to say, it sounds good. This kind of music is all about the production rather than lyric (except for the hook) or melody, and you have done that really well in my opinion. There's a couple of spots, such as at 0:4…
I actually like the lyric. It's simple, no frills, but it does the job, especially with the vocal style you're using. I can't help feeling I'd like to hear a bit less distortion on the guitar. Also, have you thought of adding drums? That rhythm w…
It all looks good to me 😀
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