Bring it back
https://audius.co/sidshovel/bring-it-back (right click then open link in new tab,) to open song.
lyrics SS music/vocals Ai
[intro]
[Exposition 1]
Come on home to me, when your done,
leave behind all those childish wishes.
When you've had all your shallow fun,
put aside those wanton kisses.
[Exposition 2]
I'm not tryin' to tie you down,
I just need you to be mine.
Can't face bein' on the shelf,
a forgotten vintage wine.
[Development]
When you went you took my heart,
left the space that held my love.
The only colour I wear is black,
I beg you, bring it back.
[Exposition 3]
I can be what you want of me,
as long as it's in your world.
Just you an' me in our bed,
I can't play Tuesday's girl.
[Development]
When you went you took my heart,
left the space that held my love.
The only colour I wear is black,
I beg you, bring it back.
[Exposition 4]
They're younger, prettier, smarter
have no lines that shouldn't be there.
Their lithe bodies suit your artist eye,
no signs of wear an' tear.
[Development]
When you went you took my heart,
left the space that held my love.
The only colour I wear is black,
I beg you, bring it back.
[Transition]
Fashion moved away from you,
another sweet young thing.
Welcome mats taken indoors,
your calls that kept on ringin'.
[Development]
When you went you took my heart,
left the space that held my love.
The only colour I wear is black,
I beg you, bring it back.
[outro]
The season was about to start,
I was the face, of Christian Dior.
You came to me, my heart in hands,
I knew, one day you'd bring it back.
Comments
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Great lyrics Sid. The Ai does what it should..I think. I'm trying so hard not to get into any in depth discussion about the merits or otherwise about Ai generated music on the main board here, but this is driving me nuts!! I just want to hear an original voice, some real musicianship. I reckon this arrangement could work rather well with a real band. But that isn't what I'm hearing. I understand why you do it but....
So, yes, great lyrics Sid, but that's all. Just my opinion you understand, and not the policy of this forum😀
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Thanks Chris, your position on Ai has never wavered and I respect that. My only advice to keep you sane is simply don't click on the link and just judge the lyrics. I have always requested that people do not comment on the Ai component as I have little or no control over the output and take no credit for it. It is only made available for those who find it helpful. If you bang the door of Bedlam, someone's bound to let you in!
Sid
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That's a fair comment Sid. I woke up this morning feeling a bit guilty about my review. I will likely do as you suggest and just check out the words. As you know, I have a lot of time for your lyrics.
'If you bang the door of Bedlam, someone's bound to let you in' ...that's a heck of a line!! It belongs in a song!!😀
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I know that Chris, I confess to being a bit worried about you. Never let this Ai stuff get to you, it's just not worth it!
Let that lazy bugger RDM pick up the slack on the Ai rubbish and you handle the real stuff.
Take care,
Sid
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Curses! They're on to me! Better look like I'm doing something for a while 😉
A delightful tapestry of emotional anguish and melancholic yearning, wrapped in a splendid lyrical form! One can't help but notice the juxtaposition of tender sentimentality with biting, almost self-aware sarcasm daring us to acknowledge the fleeting nature of beauty and affection in an unforgiving world of aesthetic judgments
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Ha Ha, love it, I'm feeling a lot better now, thanks RDM
Sid
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Wow!!😀
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One thing you don't suffer from when you use Ai is drummers! I had to listen to an hour and a half of self indulgent drivel on the phone the other day when our drummer had some kind of meltdown which I don't think even he understands..so I had no chance. At our age too!! It maybe explains why my tolerance level was a little low!
RDM's response cheered me up no end too.😁
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This is an odd one for me and i don't want to upset anyone but it sounds to me as if the lyrics are Ai written, i say that because when Ai writes it uses words we wouldn't use, like the word "lithe", and it would use the descriptions of Exposition and Development instead of verse and chorus as we would use, if i'm wrong then i'm sorry for judging but something just felt off about them, can't put my finger on it, it might just be a case of my thinking of the words i would use and it sounds an odd word to use, us southeners do'nt use pretty words like that , lol
the song itself is too slow, its over 5 mins and if you up the tempo i think it will work better and be shorter, songs these days are around 3 mins.
the song also starts off being a song saying you went and i want you to come back coz you took my heart then it becomes about a fashion model getting old, or am i just not getting it? lol
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I would be extremely careful if I were you accusing people of duplicity, especially me. Every word I post on this forum is my own and always has been and always will be. I suggest you keep your comments to yourself in future and certainly do not comment on mine, they are no longer welcome.
FYI exposition, development, etc are leftovers from Ai prompts for music/vocals as I advise my readers in Discussions/Ai issues to use for more stability.
A songwriter you may be, a judge of character you are not!
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I think we can safely rule out the lyric being AI written. It's got Sid's fingerprints all over it!
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I did not accuse anyone of anything i simply said they looked Ai written due to some of the words used, i also said it may be because its not my genre and they may use words like that in the songs in that genre.
i even add that it might just be me not being posh enough to know the words.
your reaction is overboard and jumps to conclusions, those of a guilty man, joke, lol
i do think you took it wrongly, it was not meant as an accusation.
i'm leaving the forums not because of this but because there is literally about 5 users active and its not helping with regards to feedback due to low numbers of comments.
good luck with the forum and good luck to all the writers, but stay away from using Ai to write your lyrics, lol
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good riddance LOL, LOL
this doesn't mean you, cos I don't say it's you, LOL, LOL
I do mention the word good so it can't be bad. LOL. LOL
I'd take five decent people over one ar*ehole any day, LOL. LOL
Sid LOL, LOL 😂
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Sid I loved the lyrics and their feel. They create a sense of reverie but with deep longing carried through the song. Maybe one day my poems/lyrics will be as good as the members here.
The music/ai I won't comment on except to say it allowed me to hear your concept so its in my head using the singer and sound of the song. Obviously real musicians/singer playing this would provide the emotional sound needed.
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