Standing in the Rain
Hi all,
My first post here. Recently discovered Suno and rediscovered a old hobby of creating Songs.
Honest feedback appreciated, be critical if needed. Thx
Words = Me
Music = Suno
style = Indie/pop/rock
https://suno.com/s/aZsWiV7JES4l4Iyc
[Verse 1]
Seen her at the Spyhouse Coffee Shop
She drifted in and time kinda stopped
That easy laugh, that warm smile
Wanted her to stay for a while
When our eyes met, there was lightning
My heart thud, thud, Thundering
[Pre-Chorus 1 ]
Imagined us together
Sunny skies and fair weather
Holding hands on the beach
But then she left me
[Chorus 1]
Just standing in the rain,
Drops Rolling Down my face
Can’t wash the regret away
Lacked the Nerve, I Needed more
Couldn’t brave into the storm (now)
Now I’m standing in the rain
[Verse 2]
Caught inside day-Dreaming
She walked outside, was leaving
Followed her, but I was too slow
She got an Uber, and had to go
Watched as she drove away
Thinking ‘bout what I didn’t say
[Pre-Chorus 2 ]
Imagined us together
Let’s make this last forever
I could meet her family
But then she left me
[Chorus 2 ]
Just standing in the rain
Drops Rolling Down my face
Can’t wash the Regret away
Lacked the Nerve, I Needed more
Couldn’t Brave into the storm (now)
I’m still standing in the rain
[Bridge]
I’m Re-playing how it went
Wondering what could’ve been
I’m perfect for Her, she’ll never know
I froze up like my Frappuccino,
(ohhh)
[Final Chorus]
I’m standing in the rain
Drops Rolling Down my face…
Can’t wash the regret away…
Lacked the Nerve, I Needed more…
Couldn’t Brave into the storm (now)…
I’m Just standing in the rain…
[Outro]
Standing in the rain…
Standing in the rain… (ooo…)
Standing in the rain… (whoa…ooo…)
Comments
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Hey there MuskieBait44... This has a very nice groove. The lyrics are really fine.
Do you write melodies or are you strictly a lyricist? Just a very good song.
BTW, do you fish and do you live in Alaska, by chance?
Just some good stuff. kudos
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Nice song, I too would like to know more about what input you had in creating the music. Whatever it's a very polished and commercial modern rock track. 😀
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Primarily lyrics for the most part. I have an idea of a sound i'm looking for when writing, but don't have the skills to bring it to life the way i want. I have played around with recording something very basic and let Suno beef it up.
I live in MN and go fishing in Ontario as much as i can.
thanks for the comments. 👍️
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love the vibe :)
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Hello and welcome to TSF!
Regret for what we didn't do. I think a lot of people will empathize with this!
Not too heavy, and a nice groove. Straight pop song.
I like that it's the Spyhouse Coffee Shop. The extra detail makes it feel real.
"I froze up like my Frappuccino," That's a good line. Almost cute, but not in this context. And again I like the specificity.
I like how there's a long pause after "and time kinda stopped" but maybe that's a happy accident!
It's a nice song, and an easy listen. 😁
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A quote from the movie Empire records in 1995 has stuck with me. " I do not regret the things i've done, but those i did not do."
thanks for the comments. 👍️
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Woah... MN... a lot to write about there!
I get some of my best ideas while fishing!
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I like the overall concept - I feel like there's a hook in there that needs to be teased out - maybe from the outro
Standing in the rain…
Standing in the rain… (ooo…)
Standing in the rain… (whoa…ooo…)
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LOL , tell me about it. its so embarrassing I didn't even want to say . The state bird is the loon so its fitting. 🤪
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Howdy, Stranger!