Carryin' Me
https://suno.com/song/fe1cdbe2-ec9b-4a99-8b50-4820215d4745
(original demo embedded on SUNO link)
CARRYIN' ME
[Verse 1]
Just like my earth now she's a beauty brightens up my eyes
Under my feet I walk weak and weary on the world's disguise
[Chorus]
I've been following this road too long till the path is narrow and the winds are strong
My only solace is in her song, in her song
[Verse 2]
(A-carrying me)
A-carrying me
A-carrying me on home
[Verse 3]
I was a prophet till I heard the word and I realized
A man who can't see what he's been given is rarely wise
[Chorus]
I have failed and I've been wrong
I felt the nails as I wandered among
A million lost souls waiting for a song
[Verse 4]
A-carrying me
Yeah, carrying me, oh-oh
A-carrying me on home
[Chorus]
Yeah, everywhere I turn the truth becomes beauty
Wounded in battle in the line of duty
I want to get home but I'm afraid it'll be a long
A long time before, long time before I hear
Her song
[Outro]
(Carrying me)
(Carrying me)
(Carrying me)
(Yeah)
(Been carrying me)
(Carrying me)
Comments
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Love that dirty, bluesy guitar! Good song overall.
Not sure about the labelling you're using here for the various parts - not that it matters! The 'A-carrying me" part feels like the chorus to me, with the part before that being a pre-chorus. And "Yeah, everywhere I turn the truth becomes beauty" seems like a bridge.
I think my favorite line is: "Under my feet I walk weak and weary on the world's disguise" It's more poetic than the other lines, but it's the alliteration that I think makes it work so well.
Good stuff.
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HOla, it sounds great, very good one!!! Suno is learning a lot how to do things! and you?
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Hi Kojak- I don't believe I have ever seen you on the forum, but I have been gone for a few months. Happy New Year!
I enjoyed the song and it's very catchy!!! It was nostalgic to me and brought back my childhood (the great 70's)!
Your lyrics are very poetic and well written.
Overall: This is something you can do a line dance to, and I enjoyed it.
Keep up the great work!
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