All Your Lies

JT424

Here's a new song from my new album "Dark, Beautiful World." It's called "All Your Lies."

Verse 1 (Soft piano, acoustic guitars, pedal steel and strings)

Another night without you
My heart can't take it anymore
You don't know how to tell the truth
As you walk through the door
You tell me you're not lyin'
Don't wanna keep fightin'
I start cryin'
I'm just dyin'

Chorus (add electric guitars and drums)
I can't take all your lies
I can't take all your lies
It's too much to take
Nothin' left to say
Gotta walk away
I can't take all your lies
So I'm tellin' you goodbye


Verse 2:
I just can't trust you
There's nothin' you can say to me
I've been holdin' on for too long
Why did it take me so long to see
All the hurtin' I've been feelin'
The time I'm wastin'
All for nothin'
Should've seen it comin'
now I'm gonna start runnin'


Chorus:


(bombastic guitar solo)


Bridge:
I'm on my own now
What am I gonna do?
I don't know, but I know I'm over you

Chorus:


(Music fades)

ChrisPrice

I'm curious as to why you're only posting the lyrics to your songs. There's absolutely nothing wrong with posting lyrics here of course, but it seems a bit strange to me if you have an album in the making. I'd like to hear what you're creating.

So said, these words all fit together very well and the description of the instrumentation sound promising. I'm hoping that you'll post a track or two from your album. One or two of us might buy it!!😀

RainyDayMan

Tons of emotion here, and that's great. Can tell it's a country song just from how it's written.

I particularly like that Bridge. Sometimes simple is best.

Good stuff.

RainbowKeeper

This one is a real emotion flow and I can imagine it being performed on stage, and that’s always a good sign.
Personally I’d think of shorten up a few lines to give it a bit more „heart broken“-aggression. It works very well when you use „comin‘…runnin‘….fightin‘“, I can feel the jumping heart there so a few little cuts in the other lines would help keeping this feeling…for example:

Another night without you
My heart can't take it no more
You don't know how to tell the truth
As you walk through the door
tell(in’) me you're not lyin'
Don't wanna keep fightin'
I start cryin'
I'm just dyin'

To me it’s a bit more shorten and more rough now and that helps with staying in the character of the whole thing.
Anyway all in all it’s already good stuff.
I hope I could have been helpful!
Cheers
RK

Kayla813

Great work