What D'You Think of That?
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Inspired by meeting a great lady, so obviously I wrote a song about her! Could probably do with a bit of editing of the instrumental outro. Will probably get to it.
Is it a crime, you're on my mind?
It's a matter of fact
Love you more than I did before
What d'you think of that?
I'm a wreck when I kiss your neck
And your stunning back
Nothing less, you're a Goddess
What d'you think of that?
On my knees for your mysteries
Undiscovered map
When you smile, I gotta stay a while
What d'you think of that?
Intelligent plans, elegant hands
And you love your cat
I rejoice your heavenly voice
What's the point of that?
You get no peace from the thought police
Least from where I'm sat
You're no fake, you're wide awake
What d'you make of that?
A cheeky cow, and a sweetheart now
The world's turned to crap
Fact or fiction, contradiction
What d'you think of that?
Comments
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Great Idea asking a question on a hook , Looks good , sounds good . kinda going sideways , mixing in this girl , then talking politics , world going to hell . My world's gone to crap . This is about this girl . Not the world and nightmares
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You seem to be meandering. In verse 4, what do you mean by “what’s the point of that”? Point of what? Also, why doesn’t she get peace from the thought police? And how does “the world’s turned to crap” connect to your feelings for her? The music is great — really catchy melody.
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Love the vibe... had my foot a'tapping.
Nice lyrical hook...dug the melody, as well.
Anyways... I liked it! Nice and upbeat
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"What D'You Think of That?" is a great title and hook! And if feels very down to earth and relatable.
"And your stunning back" doesn't quite land for me. Maybe more like "sliding down your back"?
When it gets to "Intelligent plans, elegant hands" I feel like you need a change up in the music. You've got a short break after that, maybe bring it in there?
Very easy to listen to, great rhythm to it and should be good fun to sing along with.
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Thanks for liking the music, Bhengen, and your points on the lyrics. All fair points. Lyrics are subjective, and you're right they meander, it's just a list of things I like about this woman. The "what's the point" bit was just to mix it up a bit, and add another internal rhyme, sort of. No one gets peace from the thought police, it's what they do! They won't leave us alone. With "the world's turned to crap" line, that was just showing what a delight she is even though the world has turned upside down. Since 2020. Cheers!
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Good suggestions, RainyDayMan. I'd thought about adding a different chord sequence at some points. My usual songs have a verse, chorus, middle, outro etc structure. This one felt okay to leave as the same chords throughout, as the melodies change over them, the instruments come in and out, etc. The stunning back line is deliberate, but it won't be for everyone. It's not a part of the female body that gets enough attention, in my opinion. Hers deserves a mention! Cheers!
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I love this hook as well - my only issue is with final verse the line "a cheeky cow" probably could be rethought - I do like the "fact or fiction" line is a great way to close the song
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