Dandelion
Lyrics : Me | Music: Suno
all comments appreciated
https://suno.com/s/J7fEDMIGYEEbAhjJ
[Verse 1]
The Wild-flowers gently sway in the wind
I’ve walked this field since I was a kid
Chasing butterflies beneath the blue sky,
Feel the warmth on my skin, from the sunshine
[Pre-Chorus]
My daddy said to me
The answers are in the good book
You’ll find the way and the light
Turns out he wasn’t lyin’
[Chorus]
Don’t know my direction
But i'll try...to find it
Until then I’ll be happy driftin’
In the breeze like a dandelion
(Ohhh..ooo..)
[Verse 2]
Brother taught me to catch cats in Rum creek
Beat his record when I was thirteen
Jump’n from the old rope swing at the lake
I sure miss those summer days…
[instrumental 2 bars]
(Hmm)
[Bridge]
Lost in thought on a crooked bridge
Between the life you learn from
and the one you live
I’m growing up, taking my time
When I’m ready, Lord, give me a sign
[Pre chorus]
This is what My Mama told me
You seek the truth from above
Don’t rush what you aint sure of
Turns out she aint lyin…
[Chorus]
Don’t know my direction
But I'll try....to find it
Until then, I’ll be happy driftin’
In the breeze like a dandelion
[Post Chorus]
Pappy says to make hay
While the sun is shine’n
Until then I’ll be happy driftin’
In the breeze like a dandelion
[Outro]
Don’t know what I’ll find
Driftin’ like a dandelion
Yeah...I don't mind
Just Driftin’ like a dandelion… (oooo…)
…like a dandelion…
Comments
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I'll comment after you post the link to suno 😁
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LOL , i;m a dum dum 🤪
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who hasn't been there.. by "cats" you mean catfish, correct, :)
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yeah, i dint think catfish flowed well in the line. i left it slang 🐈️🐟️.
now that i think about it i probably could have rearranged and made it work..
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"Cats"?... A fisherman, for sure.
Hey there MuskieBait...
Nice, lazy day tune. Very pleasing.
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thanks 🙂
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Do you really need religion in first pre ? Nice little tune in the country
sounds good Muskie
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Love this spiritual aspect to the song -
A nice lazy country tune
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Love the lyric. Sentimental look back at growing up in the country.
Drifting on the breeze like a dandelion is a great way to capture the feeling.
Not sure Suno has quite got this one right, but the feel and atmosphere is all there.
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i probably didn't need to put the bible in there, but i liked how it fit the story.
thank you
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thanks 👍️
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thank you
yeah there are some spots that i wish were better. 1st verse is a little rushed, the swoopy lift on the fist 2 lines of chorus, some of the pauses and holds are either too long or to short. the Dandelion rhyme i think could be pushed harder if it were a real singer, either by the note it lands on or/and pronunciation. i'm still trying to tweak it. Robots, what do ya do? 🤷♂️
anything particular you would change?
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I didn't like the way the 3rd line is squashed into the 4th in the first verse:
...blue sky,
Feel the warmth...
which is probably also what you meant when you said it's a little rushed.
The sort of octave jump in the first 2 lines of the chorus feels a bit off to me. But that could be just a personal preference. I prefer the last two lines. I think they work well.
I'd also prefer a little more melodic separation between the Pre-Chorus and the Verse.
These aren't show stoppers, and the overall atmosphere is a good match to the lyric. Just didn't land it 100% for mine.
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thanks, i totally agree. thats what i was hearing too. But Suno was being insubordinate.
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That's because the syllable count is off and the algorithm is trying shove all that in 4/4 time. what you can do is post your lyrics to chatgpt, gemini, copilot or claude, they parse the lines and tell you which lines fit in the time signature or not. Here s an example of what I mean, this is when I posted the verse to gemini -
The reason Suno is struggling with those last two lines is that the syllable count and the rhythmic stress (the "heartbeat" of the line) suddenly shift gears compared to the first two.
Here is a breakdown of the meter (syllables per line):
- Line 1: 9 syllables
- Line 2: 9 syllables
- Line 3: 10 syllables (but feels longer due to the "fluttery" words)
- Line 4: 9 syllables (but the word "from" creates a clunky "hiccup")
The "Suno" Problem
In the first two lines, the rhythm is a steady "gallop" (Iambic/Anapestic). In the last two, the accents fall in weird places, forcing the AI to "stretch" words to make them fit the musical bar.
Let's look at the stress patterns:
Chas-ing butt-er-flies be-neath the blue sky (The end of this line is heavy and slow) Feel the warmth on my skin, from the sun-shine (The "from the" part is a mouthful for a rhythmic track)
Two Ways to Fix It
To make it "Suno-proof," the syllables need to hit the "1 - 2 - 3 - 4" of the music more predictably.
Option 1: The "Simple & Folk" Polish (Best for Suno)
This keeps the 9-syllable count but moves the words so they flow like a natural breath.
The wildflowers gently sway in the wind, I’ve walked this field since I was a kid. Chas-ing the bright but-ter-flies in the sky, Feel-ing the warm gold-en sun pass-ing by.
- Why this works: Both lines are now exactly 10 syllables and follow the same "DA-da-da DA-da-da" pattern. Suno won't trip over "from the sunshine."
Option 2: The "Punchy" Polish
If your friend wants a more "modern" or "Pop" feel:
The wildflowers sway in the wind, I’ve walked here since I was a kid. I’m chas-ing the blue in the sky, The sun-shine is warm on my eyes.
- Why this works: It shortens everything to a crisp 7 or 8 syllables. AI models handle shorter, punchy lines with much better melodic phrasing.
A Peer-to-Peer Tip:
The rhyme between "Sky" and "Sunshine" in the original is a slant rhyme (or near rhyme). Suno often tries to make them sound the same, which can lead to a weird "twang" in the vocals. Changing "Sunshine" to something that ends with a hard "I" sound (like By, High, Eyes, or Why) will help the AI stick the landing.
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thanks for taking the time to point this out.
this will help. 👍️
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You're welcome. The only downside, is that they want to be "helpful" and re-write your lines :)
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ok, I re-worked this one. let me know if this is hitting better now.
-Thx
https://suno.com/s/voMqiAJeO2IAHG9w
(mmmm)
[Verse 1]
The Wild-flowers gently sway in the wind
I’ve walked this field since I was a kid
Chasing butterflies Under blue skies,
Feel the warmth on my skin in the sunshine
[Pre-Chorus]
My daddy always said to me
The answers are in the good book,
You’ll find the way and the light
Now I’m thinking, he might be right
[Chorus]
Don’t know my direction
But i'll try, to find it
Until then I’m happy driftin’
In the breeze like a dandy-lion
...(ooohhhh)..... like a dandelion….
(yeahhh)
[Verse 2]
My Brother taught me to fish cats in Rum creek
Beat his record when I was thirteen
Jump’n from the rope swing at the lake
I sure miss those summer days…
(Hmm)
[Bridge]
Lost in thought on a crooked bridge,
Between the life you learn from ,
and the one you’re meant to Live
I’m growing up slowly, taking my time
When I’m ready, Lord, give me a sign.
(ohhh)
[Pre chorus]
This is what My Mama told me
It’s ok, if it feels a little scary
You seek strength from above,
Don’t rush what you ain't sure of
[Chorus]
Don’t know my direction
But i'll try...to find it
Until then I’m happy driftin’
In the breeze like a dandy-lion
Don’t know my direction
But i'll try...to find it
Until then I’m happy driftin’
In the breeze like a dandy-lion
(ohhh)
[outro-fade out]
Don’t know what I’ll find
Driftin’ like a dandelion
Yeah...I don't mind
Just Driftin’ like a dandelion… (oooo…)
…like a dandelion…
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Much better, sounds great :)
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Thanks0
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its a sweet tune , I guess Ruth B Dandelions went viral . Still enjoyed your story though
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thanks
I never heard of her but i did listen to it after i finished writing mine. Hers is plural, so totally different 😁
Ella Langley did single release "Danelion" same time I did mine. She has good lyrics too. I think she is spying on me. what are the chances? 😳
No matter, other than here none of my songs will see the light of day. HaHa
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Kudos for being ready to rework. I don't think you can expect anything to come out perfect first time!
There's a marked step up to my ear. It feels more polished, and smoother.
Good job on this!
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Thank you 👍️
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Mine either lol . Yeah she's spying on you and the FBI . Id ask her if she's single , always good to practice
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