Poetry Contest

StoneFlowers

Inspired by distance writing collaborations with a cousin in Portland OR

https://soundcloud.com/user-494998212/poetry-contest?si=3d81bab1ed50431faef5a4ad489f1faf&utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing

I saw a light growing up in the hills

A distant view of the ocean

And my sight got filled

And my stories unfolded

They’re still unfolding

You grew up by a river 

watching silver run to the ocean

And you’re eyes got filled

And your lines unfolded

They’re still unfolding

Let’s make a bet who can stare the longest

And we’ll come to deliver

I’ll watch from up in the hills

You keep your eyes on the river

And when a moment shows us

Lines and stories of promise

We’ll find a rhyme for a poetry contest

I’ve run out words more than once

Living out on the hot sands

So I dig in my mind 

and run through it again

And I always end up back where I’m from

Now you chase your lines in the city

But there’s no river there to believe in

No silver views in the distance beholding

We’re both still unfolding

 

Let’s not see who can wait the longest

Let’s come together and deliver

to a place in the hills

To a place by your river

And when a moment shows us

Lines and stories of promise

We’ll find a rhyme for a poetry contest

When we’re up in the mountains

When we’re adrift on the sea

Hills and rivers forever in mind

shape our stories and lines

Stories and lines of  promise

For a poetry contest  

sidshovel

I'm afraid poetry is beyond me S/F, so I'll confine my comments to the rhyming scheme which I do understand and appreciate. Some very interesting lines in there, a lot which are more obvious when sung.

I actually did enjoy it, but apologise for my lack of understanding.

Sid

HummerWisdom

Interesting lyric, @StoneFlowers reminds me of a co-writer, 'Zoner' was his nickname. We wrote often together and when writing the lyric we'd play my turn, your turn; I'd come in with a line and then he would. It worked very well most of the time. Thank you for the memory. Now, for a listen.. love the soft touch on the guitar on this one; very pretty.

Renee 💌

StoneFlowers

Thanks for listening. Collaborations can be so rewarding. Which reminds me @HummerWisdom Renee I'm due to get back to you on that second rendition of Just A Kid. I've got some music worked up to your lyrics...coming at cha shortly...too many music balls in the air...

RainyDayMan

I like the lyric, though I suspect it has more meaning personally to you than to a general audience.

I found the melody a bit less distinct and memorable than most of your songs - it didn't stick with me afterwards, though it sounded fine as you were singing it.

ElvisNash

Pretty cool idea , lines lead to the hook poetry contest , nice job man