The Jabberwocky
Reading lewis carroll's through the looking glass and what alice found there, and come upon the jabberwocky poem, then remembered Donovan did a song based on the poem. Very creative..
for those not familiar, here is a link to his song..
https://youtu.be/XQCFIE3c_ns?si=AsW8Nx_7aTKbL0CW
Which really puts what I did to shame, but then not Donovan..
I've also like the spinning wheels line from the song of the same name from blood, sweat and tears and tried to combine the two.
In a nod to Carroll, I used portmanteau in the outro.
https://suno.com/song/e84e7526-4ca3-4713-852c-f94ce341b2d2
Lyrics are mine.. music & vocals are AI.
[Verse 1]
Suspended in the glow of sunsets
Where orange lemon yellows melt
And purply hues casting shadows
Sparklin diamonds in Orion's belt
[Verse 2]
I must fight the Jabberwocks,
The Jubjubs and Bandersnatches
My inner demons and turmoils
Freeing me from locks and latches
[Chorus]
Spinning wheels, ball bouncin round
Only in shadows are troubles found
Spinning wheels and spinning time
Can't Let vines of indecision climb
[Verse 3]
Twirling blacks and ivory shades
Silvery sharp edges cutting minds
Twisting branches of tumtum trees
Decisions fleeting with the breeze
[Bridge]
I take the potion that makes me tall
Making my problems seem very small
The jabberwocky slain, nevermore
My demons are past, and I close the door
[Chorus]
Spinning wheels, ball bouncin round
Only in shadows are troubles found
Spinning Wheels and spinning time
Can't Let vines of indecision climb
[outro]
The ophislither doth herald a new dawn
Skinneslashing my soul of the demsprite
Freed from the branches of the tumtum
In Carroll's words where I gain insight
Comments
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Well that's a ride Bill! Enjoyed that. Some great names you managed to get in there.
Great idea to adapt a famous story, good opportunities in that I think.
Lovely words and phrases, in this song, in particular;
"Can't Let vines of indecision climb"
nice touch that.
Sid
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@sidshovel - thanks for the comments. that line gave me the most trouble :).. glad you like it.. can't go wrong with donovan, but jaberwocky, was my late-wife's least favorite song of his.. I think it's brilliant :)
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You got these poetry songs nailed man , Sounds good
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@ElvisNash - thanks.. not the music I wanted. but it works
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I'm not familiar with the genre
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@ElvisNash - was going after donovan's style only with a female
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I liked the re-interpretation of personal demons within the Jabberwocky framework.
My favorite lines:
I take the potion that makes me tall
Making my problems seem very small
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@RainyDayMan - Thanks owen. Not sure what other interpretations of that poem is. But my take on it is overcoming adversity..That line is derivation of Jefferson airplane's white rabbit song, One pill makes you larger, and one pill makes you small. I kept true to alice in wonderland, by keeping it as a potion.
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@bhengen Your title initially reminded me of the Jabberjays, Hunger Games. Poetry in motion, your songs, Bill and always teaching the world something forgotten or something new. And as expected, brilliant music to go along with brilliant poetry! I may not understand every word of it but it really isn't necessary when the music takes me away. And I appreciate your introductions to your songs, otherwise, on some of them, I'd be lost.
Love it!
Renee
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@HummerWisdom - Thanks for the comment, Renee. Sometimes, it's really not so much about the words. but the music.. there is one band I'm trying to track down, where if your read their lyrics, they are non-sense.. but w hen put to music, they come alive. That's the beauty of the prog rock or experimental rock genre, you are free to explore As jimmy Hendrix says - "I’m gonna wave my freak flag high, high!" :)
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I can't think of Donovan without hearing Season of the witch in my head which I have always loved.
You have done an amazing job with this, making it your own. My roots are Welch, so the music speaks to me but the words on the Donovan version are way beyond any cognitive abilities I might have. Your version made it all make sense.
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@barry - Thanks. Love that song too.. it was my late wife that got me into donovan.. Donovan, took the exact poem from carroll, which caroll wrote in specific dialect..
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I saw that, I listened to both and tried to read the poem, but the dialect was beyond my comprehension. The music was good tho
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