Forgotten place
RK
FORGOTTEN PLACE
(with a special thanks to D. and M.)
Stone by stone, higher and higher. A‘
They had built you for a reason
Up here on the hill, above town
Weathered stone facing the season
As if angels opened the door
You walk inside the holy halls
Follow footsteps of believers
Frescos of saints along the walls
Dark dust has covered all the pews. A+
Old books full of christian rites
And sunlight breaks at the windows
Frames all the saints in coloured lights
And now close your eyes and listen
Say, can you hear them pray and sing?
And does God’s love make you shiver?
Are you touched by an angel’s wing?
Forgotten place B
Forgotten stories
Forgotten pain, so much to suffer
Forgotten place
Forgotten hopes
While ‘being’ gets rough and rougher
Forgotten place
Forgotten stories
Forgotten pain, so much to suffer
Where do you turn to,
If life gets tougher?
Oh if this walls could talk, C
They would tell so many stories
Of celebrations, of people who rejoice
Oh if this walls could talk,
They would tell so many stories
Of silent prayers, of sinners and tears
Light up a candle and hope
light guided them through their sorrows and fears
And there, high above the altar. A*
You see the cross’s silhouette
Thats where your soul can find some rest
What wonderous feelin’ do you get?
©&® by Ian P.
W&M by Ian P.
09.01.2014 for: VALENTINE
Comments
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cool lyrics.. would be curious to hear how it sounds with music
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Thanks bhengen. All I know is that I want some old school instruments for this one. Still trying to figure out the final melody.1
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I like the song. It's a nice theme, and a more unusual subject.
I'm a bit less sure of your B section. It seems to turn there from the forgotten places to the narrator with lines like:
While ‘being’ gets rough and rougher
Where do you turn to,
If life gets tougher?
or at least that's how I interpreted it, and that change of perspective felt a bit out of context.
But the rest felt right.
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@RainbowKeeper what a great subject to write on! Great job. Looking at the comments, I have to agree with Owen. The 'being' line in your Bridge caught me off-guard at first read...and on the second. I wonder if using the word 'living' vs. 'being' might work better? But then, there's Owen's comment to consider, still.
Keep 'em coming. I love reading your lyrics as that's my favorite part of songwriting!
Renee
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Ty guys1
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I have a friend I know from work and that is his hobby too, he spends every weekend searching out abandoned buildings. He says sometimes he just sits and listens and tries to imagine what they were like when they were full of life. Really cool writing, not something that many would even think of as a subject. I think you've done it justice.
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They're are a lot of old churches spread around the world . I'm sure Christians will get something out this song . I would suggest a faster tempo , its pretty long lyric wise
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